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Touch to be Heard
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Touch to be HeardSuch notions amassed of Spring's treasures, now found Though in longing, sweet silence, my own pleasure is bound What might someone breathe to this hesitant heart That would burn it anew with a poet's flamed art? This aching, just 'neath the smooth surface of skin Earthen eyes, mingled linens, murmurs whispered within Fallen captive, alas to wysteria's soft words budding bountiful blossoms need only touch to be heard In this Springtime's new birthing will I know dawn's delight? Or remain e'er sleeping Blind to love's mirthful night?  Claire |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is just so soft and soothing - lovely language used here Claire...really well done. What might someone breathe to this hesitant heart That would burn it anew with a poet's flamed art? Indeed - something we probably all ask ourselves.  'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Written in gentleness. I agree with the previous post - soft and soothing, even amid the longing. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ You write with such soft, graceful feathered passion. Always, but always, a pleasure to read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Heh, I plan on being passed over for love this spring too Clair, you are not alone  Excellent poem. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Her graceful pen In rhythm passes Leaving words For lads and lasses Soft spoken lines Bled from her heart Her touching poems Well crafted art |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Most excellent, beautiful words as always. My favorite lines: In this Springtime's new birthing will I know dawn's delight? Or remain e'er sleeping Blind to love's mirthful night? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--the way you write of love, I think that you have vision that is not "Blind to love's mirthful night." Beautiful poem! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, And a tear fell inside of me, Invisible, he could not see. Beautiful writing. *L* Sy |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Beautiful writing Claire ... I havn't been around much lately ... but as I get a chance I will go back and read what I have missed of your poems ... I know their quality won't be disappointing Rex}<((((o> |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Severn, I think you're right, in that we all feel alone and unloved or forgotten at times. Thank you for reading and letting me know what you thought. childomine, thank you. Writing, to me, is a soothing source. Marge, thank you, and the pleasure flows likewise, to be sure. Mistikman, I appreciate your reading and responding. Spring is a season of inspiration and beauty, but to share it is even more fulfilling. (*Smile*) Hoot Owl, a beautiful poem reply from a lovely and spirited lass. Thank you. JML, I'm glad you enjoyed this...thank you for reading. Martie, as always, I thank you for your reading and generous response. Rex, I've not been around as much as I would like either, so I don't think you'll find much of my work, but please do read whatever you want. I must try to catch up as well. Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed this one. Thanks to all for such encouraging responses. ~ Claire |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
MM~ this is a well crafted poem. graceful. I think that there is a typo on "wysteria" (should be wisteria or wistaria) Otherwise, well done. bboog |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
bboog, thank you for reading. It wasn't a typo, I just spelled it funny by accident. Think I'll just leave it alone though, it rather suits me that way. Thanks for your input. ~ Claire |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Dear Claire, You massage our minds with the gentle strokes, soft words and soothing grace of your poetry. This was a beautiful poem. A pleasure reading as always. Take care. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade) |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Light and lovely words, Meadowmuse. It does indeed seem that we all have a touch of spring fever.. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
In this Springtime's new birthing will I know dawn's delight? Or remain e'er sleeping Blind to love's mirthful night? This is so wonderful!!! You have such a gift within you and I cannot thank you enough for sharing it. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Poeminister, your response was lovely...thank you for reading this. Alwye, yes, what an inspiration Spring can be to the poetic heart. Thank you Butterflies, thank you for your kind response. I am grateful to have the opportunity to share poetry with all the good folks here. ~Claire |
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Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
This was exquisite. Very beautiful writing. Z |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
what beauty I found within your words.great poem!!!! Raven |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You capture the essence of springtime and the heart afraid to come out from within. What a lovely verse and thought, a mirror of my youth, laced with the emptiness that comes with low self esteem. But there is hope in the wysteria. Loved the poem Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Zelda, thank you...a very kind response. Raven, so glad you saw beauty in my work...thank you. Liz, yes, Spring is springing regardless of my timid heart. Glad to know that someone "identified" with this. Thanks so much. ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Claire, as always, this is so beautifully done! Denise |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"In this Springtime's new birthing will I know dawn's delight? Or remain e'er sleeping Blind to love's mirthful night?" This is great... I'm right there with ya... Will I?? Will I not??..  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Denise and Nan. So glad you enjoyed reading this one. ~ Claire |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Clair, This was so lovely, glad I went back looking for ones I'd missed. parker |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wistful and beautiful... well done! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I had to reply again. I also like these lines: What might someone breathe to this hesitant heart That would burn it anew with a poet's flamed art? This aching, just 'neath the smooth surface of skin Earthen eyes, mingled linens, murmurs whispered within I actually like all the lines...*S* |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
I love this part "Fallen captive, alas to wysteria's soft words budding bountiful blossoms need only touch to be heard" What a beautiful spell you have woven here..and I'm left wondering too..will she find love..or remain sleeping? "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, I love this!! You always find a way to speak so tenderly. . . What might someone breathe to this hesitant heart That would burn it anew with a poet's flamed art? I think that I know Claire, and I think that you know too. . . Simply wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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