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Michael
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0 posted 03-16-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

BROW BEATEN

You show me a blue hoop
I jump through
tentative
You pet me
I melt

You show me green hoop
I jump through
anticipate
You feed me
I need

You show me a red hoop
I jump through
excited
You hold me
I love

You show me a yellow hoop
I jump through
loyally
You beat me
I'm sad

You show me a red hoop
I jump through
hoping
You scold me
I cower

You show me a green hoop
I jump through
longing
You ignore me
I starve

You show me a blue hoop
I fear to jump
You beat me
I give up

You show me a hoop
I snarl !!!

Michael Anderson




 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron






[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-16-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 03-16-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Well written, Michael. Very sad. No one should have to jump through those hoops. It's no way to have to live.

Denise
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2 posted 03-16-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael~

This is absolutely BRILLIANT !
It's sad ... but it is sooooo true.
The old 'Jump when I say jump
and ask how high on the way up' routine
just doesn't cut it, does it?

You have penned a classic.
It's already printed out.

And, I quit wagging my tail !  
~*Marge*~


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3 posted 03-16-2000 12:12 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Okay, now this is getting weird...LOL
I know this is not meant to be funny, but you'd have to be here to appreciate it.  Not only did I relate to this--I took the hoop,
broke it up and danced the "hula" on it.LOl.
Thank you Incredible Michael, for the the incredible smile on my face, however unintentional...(I knew sparks were flying tonight but I did not think they reached all
the way to California!)
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4 posted 03-16-2000 12:16 AM       View Profile for jbowie   Email jbowie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbowie

What an excellent use of dog psychology. I found this to be very inventive and even written from a scientific view. Testing the subject and getting the Pavlovian response. Then why should they act suprised when they change the set of rewards!
Janet Marie
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5 posted 03-16-2000 12:18 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

YOU show me a poem... I reply...

I'll jump for a M. poem anytime  
perfect poem of definace M...
take care, jm


 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


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6 posted 03-16-2000 12:22 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What a terrific weaving of a thought into writing! Benn there....done that. To this day I don't even like do-nuts

Excellent writing, Michael!
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7 posted 03-16-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Well, I have to side with Janet here...all of your friends here, Michael, jump to read your poetry. The only training we've had is that each time we open one, we are mesmerized by your poetic talent. I'm glad you've decided to devote more time writing.. we are glad to read more of your work...  
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8 posted 03-16-2000 12:33 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

You show me a gold hoop
I jump through
trip
fall and break my nose
I'm not very athletic

Rex}<{{{{o>
Severn
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9 posted 03-16-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Michael - this is a sad thing you have pointed out... good work...

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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10 posted 03-16-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for childomine   Email childomine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for childomine

So many hoops and so many of us who have jumped through them in an attempt to please others.  Very sad and well written.
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11 posted 03-16-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~michael

this poem hit home with me! i can relate to the thoughts and words you have written here. another great poem from an even better poet! i can tell this poem as all of yours are was written with a great deal of emotion and thought. i am on the side of also agreeing that it was written with a kind of scientific thought. remarkable job!
Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Michael
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12 posted 03-16-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow...I didn't expect so many replies so quick.  I apologize for not getting the HTML in here in time for those of you who have already gotten to this - I got a little sidetracked.


Denise, indeed, it is not!

Marge - I still have my tail - can't never seem to stop chasing it though, it seems!  

serenity, must be something in the air!!! LOL  I believe the hoops are broken here as well.

j - I don't know but they almost assuredly are suprised, aren't they?

balladeer, sucky place to be, ain't it?  LOL on the doughnuts - I only can wish i could have one of those, you know?

PdV, sincerest thanks, will pen one up for you anytime.

Rex - ROFL  know that feeling too...LOL

Severn, you got here TOO early, I hadn't put the HTML in yet...I was going to ask you for some more critique...email me if you see this.

childomine - very sad.

Amy, I don't know if it can be considered scientific when I consider the REAL amount of hoops I've jumped through to to finally realize this just ain't right!!!

Thank you all for the kind replies - I knew many of you would be able to relate to this one.

Michael

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13 posted 03-16-2000 01:52 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

The many hoops of life and love...This rings true to this heart Michael...

And don't snarl like that...tis quite a mental picture honey!!LOL XXOO

~D



 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Michael
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14 posted 03-16-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Better be gentle with me devina, I bite!!!  


Michael


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15 posted 03-16-2000 07:02 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Well written Michael, so sad and so true.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Marilyn
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16 posted 03-16-2000 07:59 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Ummm...How do you always seem to be able to write my life? Though the hoop bearer tried one last time with a black hoop. I bit quite a chunk from his thigh...lol. Wonderful as always Michael.
X Angel
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17 posted 03-16-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I used to do those hoops too sweets. *sigh* THEY SUCK!
Awesome poem Mikeeeey
much luv ~X~
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18 posted 03-16-2000 11:31 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent analogy you used here Michael. This poem is well thought out and shows in its writing. It's hard to try to please others by being who or what they want...I gave up on that a long time ago, seems one never succeeds anyway. Nicely done here  
Severn
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19 posted 03-16-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

(Just popping in to let you know...I ain't forgot!...Just running low on the time thang...   )
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20 posted 03-16-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Inventive expression of conditioned response...it's a shame it's befallen the heart, though. Wonderful work, Michael.

~ Claire
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21 posted 03-16-2000 10:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael~
So this is what all the HOOPLA is about !
Love the added dimension of HTML colors.
Now .... go HOOP IT UP !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Nan
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22 posted 03-17-2000 07:17 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Michael.. Your poem is great - but you really shouldn't be telling the girls that you bite... You're more like a soft warm puppy... Oops - Should I not tell them that???
 
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