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To the Critic.........

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Balladeer
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0 posted 03-15-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


If I were writing poetry for class
I would expect to get some kind of grade
And possibly, I would or would not pass
Depending on the effort I had made.

If I were writing verse to win a prize
I'd pay attention to each dot and dash
No error would escape my watchful eyes
And maybe I would win a little cash.

But I am simply writing here to friends
Kind people here that I have come to know
And whether I am good or not depends
On what I have to say and not the flow.

So if my poetry is not correct
Small comments do not interest me because
I'm writing for the people I respect
Who judge me for my heart and not the flaws.
© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
PhaerieChild
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1 posted 03-15-2000 10:30 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Very well put Balladeer!! I write for myself and for those I consider friends. I have enough critics in my life. I sure don't need another one. Love it!!!

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 03-15-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
You are a whole deck of cards. Love your poem. Stay well and love to Franni.
Michael
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3 posted 03-15-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Amen - the truest test of any poem is how it touches the heart.  Very well said.


Michael
Nan
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4 posted 03-15-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Well, Deer... I've noticed you haven't been in class... You must be hanging around out here in the OPEN with all your friends then...

I see  how it is.. Course I personally think that ALL of your poems are perfect already..

Tell me when you want critique - I'll send you over to Critical Analysis and sic Brad & jbouder on ya....  


[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-15-2000).]
WhtDove
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5 posted 03-15-2000 10:38 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great words come from the heart! As this did, Great Balladeer! Words so true.
devina
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6 posted 03-15-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I think I can name one critic to the death...but I won't start anything...this poem totally reflected my mood at the moment...I hope the critic reads it!!! Thanks deer!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 03-15-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
YES !
And if you get bboogged down ... call a tow truck !    
YES !
Love you to pieces !
~*Marge*~


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Poet deVine
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8 posted 03-15-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I'll say it again...I read with my heart not my head! Your poetry is always flawless because it touches my heart.......

[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-15-2000).]
Butterflies_dont_cry
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9 posted 03-15-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

This one hits the mark!!!!  Perrrrrrrrrfect  
Rex Allen McCoy
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10 posted 03-15-2000 10:55 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Balladeer ... sorry to rain on your parade here and act like a critic
... but ...
while we're on the subject ... I think you should unstraighten you tie a little ... so that you look a bit less presentable

Rex}<{{{{o>
bboog
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11 posted 03-15-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

This comment has been removed as per profanity.  Please check the forum guidelines or feel free to email me if you have any questions on this, bboog.

Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-15-2000).]
RainbowGirl
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12 posted 03-15-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal:..I couldn't agree with you more, there is a time and a place for criticism and Open is not the place and although I don't mind anyone giving suggestions to anything I write, I realised a few moments ago that "what is said" can offend other people, I received mail a short time ago where someone was really upset on my behalf because bboog suggested an alteration and I'm sat here dumbfounded at the above post (may have changed as I'm debating this post....*sigh*

I know I get cheesed off when reading another author's work if someone is not very diplomatic (hmmm) but never really thought of it in relation to my work as they are mostly thoughts that I post and not any great works or anything...but this person was my sister and she is upset...and I signed on just now and read this piece of yours, really made me think even more about how others read all our comments and how soemtimes we just don't know what is going on in the background...

My apologies, delete this if I'm out of order, guess I'm a little bit sad that someone got hurt unnecessarily...

HUSG
Corinne
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13 posted 03-15-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

ROFL!

I love it!

Cor
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14 posted 03-15-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Heart to heart.....I think that is the only writing that really matters! This is wonderful Balladeer! I couldn't have said it any better!

Denise
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15 posted 03-16-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you all for your comments and agreement.

Rainbow.....out of order? You are beautiful....and your poetry is beautiful BECAUSE you are beautiful.

Nan...CA Forum? No way! Those guys are too tough for me!!!
jbowie
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thanks for saying it.
Severn
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17 posted 03-16-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hmmmm...good points 'deer.

Might I suggest that...

ROTFLMAO!



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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18 posted 03-16-2000 09:36 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Balladeer: I can always count on you to say what needs to be said... and package it in a great poem. I was more than ready to screech and holler at a self-appointed Poetry God... thanks for letting me keep what little dignity I have. *G*
Martie
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19 posted 03-16-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Thank you Deer, you are the best----I was wondering how to express my dismay and now you have done it for me.  XXXOOO  
Local Rebel
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20 posted 03-16-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

There ya go!  What Deere said... yep!  
hoot_owl_rn
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21 posted 03-16-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

You GO!!!! Love it  
Pepper
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22 posted 03-16-2000 01:14 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Thank you 'Deer !!!!  I think most of us here share these feelings .....
JamesMichael
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23 posted 03-16-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Believe me I appreciate the acceptance here after posting a few in critical analysis.  I know that if I posted my poems in a poetry contest or submitted them for publication I would be found lacking in many respects.  This is a nice forum to write from your heart and all levels of skill are accepted.  James
Elizabeth Santos
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24 posted 03-16-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I agree, and am still reeling at the thought of anyone trying to improve Martie's free verse. It's kind of like telling Bocelli he hit a few flat notes.
Loved the poem
Liz
 
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