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The Scent of You

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Martie
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The Scent of You

Before you were my mother,
you were porcelain-skin youth
and eyes the color of a foggy day sea.
I know that hint of smile
in the glass frame
with traces of sunset lit hair,
it is a picture of you
staying.

Just dipped
finger in Chanel No.5,
behind each ear,
was the scent of you
leaving.

Shaded good books
and clothes line strung
with gathering sunlight,
hunched over pick up sticks
and hand-cut paper dolls,
this cool sun-dried sheet,
the scent of you
staying.

I never saw you
in the Petunia
until I found one
in my garden
and breathed
the scent of you
staying.

I search for
arch of lid
breath of flower                    
and trace my finger
on the cold mirror
and see you in me
staying.

I breathe you
for you remain behind each ear
with scent of you
leaving.

And home still lingers
sleeping in sun-dried sheets,
the scent of you
staying.




[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-16-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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Martie  this is SO beautiful and PERFECT

this really touched me...
i have a small sachet of Chantilly powder from my grandmother...when ever I want to rememeber what her hugs were like...I take in that fragrance and she is there.
thanks for sharing this.
take care, jm
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Oh, Martie, this is absolutely lovely.  Yes,  scents do linger in our memories, like melodies, to surprise us any time at all. And yes, I can see my mother in my mirror too. Tears, my friend.  Tears.  A strong, well-worded poem.

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Now this is poetry.....so beautiful...the words...the format....the staying and the leaving....Very Excellent.
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I'm lucky enough to still have my mother and father but your poem does remind me of the little things that can spark a reminisce of a loved one from our past ... I quite often see my kids as toddlers and it strikes pangs of longing in my heart to relive those days

Rex}<{{{{o>
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'and see you in me
staying'

Oh, Martie, I absolutely love that line! Beautiful, touching poem!

Denise
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Martie, your poetry always makes scents to me. Another beautiful work....
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Oh, Martie~
You've squeezed my heart.
Images come in rapid fissure.
Mirrored reflection shows
she lives on in me.

Tears of easy-remembering send me to the
chiffonier ... wrapping me in her scent
left on delicate lace.

One small bottle of Joy, unopened,
holding her scent for all time.  
I caress the smoothness of the crystal bottle.  
Now I fully understand the note
she tucked in the box.

Darling daughter ... something to remember me by ..
Love Mother 10/12/94

Martie ... thank you.
~*Marge*~




[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 03-15-2000).]
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Martie, this is a sweet poem and I liked it. I think that some of us olfactory impaired men (like me) would like a descriptive phrase after Chanel No. 5. You know exactly how it smells. The challenge is to describe it to me (the reader) so that I can relate immediately to it. (Some of us may not know that smell simply by the name Chanel No. 5) Yet if I say freshly mowed grass, you might instantly know the scent.
Also the line "sleeping in sun-dried sheets" might work better "snuggled in sun-dried sheets" ? Your call.
Hopefully this doesn't annoy you too much.
bboog
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Martie...this is so touching. Always your imagery is delightful  
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This is wonderful, Martie.. It's a great tribute..
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Well Martie - got any of that oxygen I find you happen to take away whenever I read one of your poems? Whatcha trying to do - kill me??

K

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life enriches writing'
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Janet Marie--I am so glad that this touched you and brought back your own memories.

Rosemary--Isn't it nice to be able to see her everyday in yourself, she must have been beautiful.

JML--Your excellent made me smile  

Rex Allen--Yes it is wonderful, those triggers and memories--I have a few toddler ones too

Denise--I'm so glad my poem touched you

Balladeer--Your reply scent me--and smiled my face

Marge--your reply brought tears--thank you sweet friend

bboog--I think you missed the point

Ruth--Thank you for always touching me with your replies

Nan--she was a wonderful woman

Kamla--You want to exchange oxygen containers?
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Martie: I always know I'm in for a treat when I open one of your poems... this is delightful!!!
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WOW, this is a wonderful poem! Butterscotch always reminds me of my grandmother!  

Keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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Martie: I love this, the images it conjures up and the memories as well..

I have always worn Opium, (I did dab a little on the screen so I hope it can be smelt, in case no one knows the smell)...oooops, shame on me..*g*...and a few times someone has remarked that they smelt it somewhere and thought of me...and when I've been working, I've been tracked by the smell as well..LOL..i.e. they know I've been in an office cause the scent lingers on...I guess not many women wear it but I adore it, makes me smile just to smell it..

Big HUSG

 I love the way I look in your eyes, I'm just me tho'...
We are all works in progress, no?

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Suthern--I feel the same about yours

Love Bug--Thanks for the Wow--and butterscotch--sensory memories are wonderful!

RG--Makes me want to go out and test some Opium, so I can think of you...you are so sweet.
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I'm with Kamla ... hey... please pass the oxygen....
Martie, this made me think of my grandmother, Her scent of choice was lavander ....  
Another perfect and most beautiful piece ...
Love,
Shannon
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