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~ My Storybook is Closed ~
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~ My Storybook is Closed ~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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 Now then...Once Upon a Time... There was this scared little girl who one day found a magic book - she took it to her darkened room jumped in bed to take a look... It's cover shimmered brightly and the pages smelled so new - she opened it so carefully stepped inside, and fast she flew... There before her was a world so vast of happiness and blue - skies so full of funny people some were strangers, some she knew... So many different characters welcomed her with open arms- There were ladies fair in beauty there were princes sweet with charms... There were knights & lonely maidens horses, dragons, fairies too - There were clowns & fools and even some who looked like me and you. There were shooting stars & dreams Rainbows, Roses, Butterflies - All this splendor overwhelmed her Magic danced before her eyes...  So on and on she read, adventures, dreams, and fantasy - And far away she flew She forgot reality. Her wings were strong, she flew with grace she soared the magic sky - She slayed the dragons, wished on stars and sang with lullaby. This little girl so brave now in the pages of this book - She hid within her fairy-tale and didn't want to look... At the real world all around her cold & barren - full of lies... Reality can seem so cruel it comes as no surprise... Why so many little children run to the shelves within - to find a magic book thereon where fairy-tales do spin... Where lords & ladies dance in love the butterflies are free - to float on winds within the book Captive dreamers are set free... That little girl is me, and now I gently close this tale - this magic journey in my heart the wind on which I sail... I make a place high on the shelf to tuck this book away - As I step back to reality to face the coming day. I curtsey to the characters within this book of mine - All of you, I hold so dear You've dreamed with me in rhyme. I've lived safely in the pages of a dream. - poetFemmeFatale March 15, 2000 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful poem, poet fem, truly..... if only we could write our own happy endings and live in our dreams... very nice work with this one...great graphics as well.  take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
Wow!!! I loved your poam. I too live in dreams 4 there is where I find the soul of the child I once was, and forever will I be. Raven Legros |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
poetFemmeFatale, The magic of that world may go on and on but will never be the same without you. This is very sad for me to say the least, for the friendships wrought in this world are not of fantasy though some seem to spin upon the wheels of dream and fate. I would not ask you to ignore the reality around you, nor would I ask you to "live" in a world that seems fantasy to you. But I would ask you to remember this, the people in this storybook are very much real and will miss you greatly. I, personally hope you decide to blow some of the dust off that old book and take another look... I mean, heck, any book that good deserves to be read more than once!!! Take Care, girl, You always know where I am. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-15-2000).] |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful writing, Femme. I doubt if your storybook is closed, though. There are too many tails yet to tell. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Say it isn't so...this is REALLY nice work, here. Hope you'll be sharing more of your dreamy rhyme in the future... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Loved your poem ... I tend to read books the same way ... I don't just read them ... I live them ... and rewrite them and live them to the fullest  Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful poem. I save all my books because I love to pull out my favorites and read them again and again. If you are saying goodbye, please stop in once in a while for a chat. Take care. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is full of charm and magic even though the ending is sad. Beautiful writing, Femme! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Femme~ This is beautiful. Watch it stick around and become a Classic. I guess at times we'd all take the world of make-believe over reality. We may live in the realm of the real world, but retreat to the fairy tales with fond remembrance. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is a wonderful poem and it speaks to me of the way that many little girls are taught--to believe in fairy tales and happily ever after and that love is the answer to all questions...and of course it's much more complicated then that... |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
This poem reminded me of Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone. Have you read it? It's a beautifully written book as well as having a good story. About your poem, I think you should simply title it Magic Book because your subject really concerns magic, doesn't it? I think you might consider trimming and pruning the excess words a little~ Example, currently you write There was this scared little girl who one day found a magic book - she took it to her darkened room jumped in bed to take a look... Maybe... There once was a little girl who found a magic book she took it to her darkened room then jumped in bed to take a look. (Would a scared little girl want to go into a darkened room?) In any case, keep writing and best wishes to you. bboog |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Dreams end when you wake - Clowns remove their makeup - and friends, they come and go... Just tired of living fantasy with empty hands... I want something I can touch, besides this keyboard. So I am giving this book to the dust, and am going out to live reality and find my peace. You can't sleep forever, you know. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
PFF.....as well written as this poem is...we can't always live in a fairytale. Reality sure stinks sometimes, but it's something we can grasp onto unlike the fairtale dreams we had when we were growing up. I always had these illusions of what love should be like, laughs...haven't found that in real life yets, so perhaps I should go back to my dream world. Hey girl chin up....it will get better. E-mail me if you need to talk. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Sorry Bboog - but I am that scared little girl, and you haven't been in my room lately, have you? LOL It's been dark for quite awhile....Appreciate your thoughts though. Thanks...poetFemme |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
bboog, I am gonna state that I think there is a definate difference in offering critique and trying to override an authors vantage point. This is something I've seen you do twice now. I happen to know this little girl. She was scared - and lived in a darkened room where as she had no choice but to return to. If you insist on basing you critique on personal point of view rather than poetic ethic, I would ask you to at least show the author respect enough to question them by email. This is an open poetry forum for poetry and reply - this is not a critical analysis forum. Please take note of that. michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-15-2000).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Gen... This is a great poem.. Personalities and personal lives aside, your poem stands tall on its own merit... Nicely done for sure..  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Gen, this was great! More than one meaning, and a fantastic tale you spin. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is a wonderful poem Gen. . . just please don't let it be your last. . . I love the words and the graphics. . .you have always spoken from the heart. . .and that's why you've always been one of my favorites. . . Good luck and much strength and love to you my friend. . .you deserve it!! -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem Femme, and I am sure I am not alone in saying we will all miss you. Be sure and visit once in awhile, we would all love to hear from you. I havent really posted many replies to your work, but I have read almost everything you have posted for the last month or so. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Thank you for your reply to my poem in Spritual Forums and for your comments. Your talent for poetry is truly amazing. I wish you peace and happiness wherever life takes you. |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
F~ just promise me that you'll read Harry Potter soon. It will bring some magic back into your life and will help you laugh at all the Muggles that are out and about. best regards, bboog |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
PFF: Some books are meant only to be read and placed back upon a shelf where hopefully another reader will lovingly smoothe their hands over the worn pages and read with avid interest...lets hope so, lets really hope so...I wish you dragons to slay, magic dust upon your wings so that you might fly with dreams intact but most importantly that you will be read with love and never put down upon a dusty shelf.. She walked through life like an unread book A million words just waiting for a look For that reader who did lose himself In the splendour of it all when he picked her from the shelf She waited for the one who would blow off the dust Lovingly opening the covers he must Move through the pages with his tender hands Find himself lost in mysterious lands Guide him through the tale slowly she will While his breath quickens and his heart stands still Take him through to the end when he sighs And rests her gently on his warm thighs When the time comes to place her back With all the others in the crowded rack He will stop to remember all that he read The joy and sorrow that linger in his head He will take her with him forever and dwell In the glorious pages of her magic spell She walks through life like an unread book A million words just remembering his look. Limited edition only I dropped a tear in the ocean when it is found, I will stop loving you... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I can't possibly go back up and say something to each one of you, as the list is long! Just want to say a sincere Thanks from the pages of this old dusty book! Balladeer - I do have many more tales to spin, however, I think I'll do my spinning outside from now on, instead of isolating myself in front of this darn monitor! It's getting tired of looking at me! bboog - I promise, I will read it. Thanks for all! Michael - I promise, no more hoops! ROFL I also wish you the best, I have seen much sunlight shining from you again...that's always nice to see, even if it's not from me! RainbowGirl - Thank you so much for the wonderful response, and the beautiful addition you left me with...That really hit home. Thank you! I do feel like an unread book...Although I feel I'm written in Japanese or something weird like that. No one seems to understand what they read! Once again, thank you all. You have all played a wonderful role in my life the last 9 months. I've met many interersting characters here to say the least! I've felt like I've visited the circus/zoo nearly everyday since last July when I joined! ROFLMAO Peace & love to you all! I will stop by from time to time, I'm sure. [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 03-16-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Classy Gen.... very... And all I could say was "Germs" rofl....but, I know whatcha mean girl... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Local Rebel - ROFLMAO I read your poem, and I'm still laughing, cause I thought you meant you wanted to germinate (you & me) ROFLMAO  Now I think I understand a bit better on where you were coming from!! LOL Gawd, I have a sick mind! hehe I left you a message in Adult on it!  Thanks for the laugh, and you don't have to email me...I was just confused! hehe Love ya man...Gen |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
As I recall, I was once told by a familiar poetess that people on passions are real and that it is reality! not a fantasy! Who could that have been? hmmm......just sending advice back to you.... "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Storybook girl, give it your best and remember, life is what you choose. Follow your dreams, and only regrets will you lose. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Poet Femme, this is precious. Lovely writing. Take care of you ~ Claire |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Dear poetFemmeFatale, This was a very beautifully written poem. But it's lined with a certain irony thats very sad. We should never fully abandon our "adventures, dreams, and fantasy" that stir our mind, while at the same time we shouldn't ignore and abandon realities, they coexist beside one another and shape each other I've always been fond to beleive. Just saddening when you say "My Storybook is Closed" Maybe just put it away for a while with a bookmark, come back to it again soon?? Be well. From Poeminister "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Go out and enjoy your life, hon. And if there comes a time when this part of your life reaches out to you again then let us share some more stories and poetry. Take care, James |
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