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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2000-03-15 02:14 PM


The leaves had collected on the ground
The wind had turned a cooler shade
Somehow there was a familiar sound
In every chorus Nature made

Freshest of air, sweetest of smell
Hoping to hold onto this moment in time
Keeping his silence, wanting to tell
All who would listen to his mind

With a new season, old season’s memory brings
Foretelling also future if dared to dream
Seeing this and many more things,
But the visions are never what they seem

What is Autumn if not a subconscious metaphor
A wake up call before the dead that is winter
His heart cries out like never before
Even as the trees crack, and splinter

Terrible though, that the knowledge is gained,
That beginnings fade into endings twilight
And all that is achieved is somehow in vain,
Like the quickening coming of Winter’s night


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-03-15 03:18 PM


Freshest of air, sweetest of smell
Hoping to hold onto this moment in time
Keeping his silence, wanting to tell
All who would listen to his mind

With a new season, old season’s memory brings
Foretelling also future if dared to dream
Seeing this and many more things,
But the visions are never what they seem
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I love this poem, its serene and full of emotion...and i like the way it builds up the the ending statement.
I like "listening to your mind" *s*
your jm


Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-03-15 06:50 PM


Wonderful poem. I really enjoyed this.  
Denise
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3 posted 2000-03-15 08:44 PM


I agree! Very beautiful!

Denise

PoeticKnight
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4 posted 2000-03-16 09:47 AM


Thank ya'll ladies...its one of the few of mine that i like looking back on....
Thanks!

Aimster
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5 posted 2000-03-16 10:11 AM


~JML

This is excellent, my friend! Wonderful scenery and images you have "painted here". You captured thoughts of a winter night, quite beautifully. Great job!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

PoeticKnight
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6 posted 2000-03-16 10:16 AM


Thank you Aimster. Winter is the best time.
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JML~ now I need a fuzzy blanket and a fire in the fireplace! This is great. -SEA
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8 posted 2000-03-16 10:57 AM


I love the imagery in this poem! I'm really big on that, although I'm not too good at it myself Passions

Anyway, keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

BluesforNarada
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9 posted 2000-03-17 05:14 AM


Wonderful poem. Your play on words creates a beautiful picture in the imagination of a paradise between heaven and earth.      
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