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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
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New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-15 11:32 AM


As the stars fall from the sky
Down upon the blue and silent world
I wipe the sleep from my eye,
I don’t know the reason why,
All the memories are of that girl

Every sight and sound, taste and touch
Comes cascading through a thickening haze
Everything that ever meant so much
Every dream of senseless things and such
Forever seen through these nights and days

And if I ever dared to see
Those things which I try to hide
All I ever was and all I ever longed to be
Is now coming back to me
A part I thought had finally died

Into the blue I fall into
No rhyme nor reason
No change of season
Into the blue



[This message has been edited by JML (edited 03-15-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-15 01:38 PM


Down upon the blue and silent world
I wipe the sleep from my eye,
I don’t know the reason why,
All the memories are of that girl
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And if I ever dared to see
Those things which I try to hide
All I ever was and all I ever longed to be
Is now coming back to me
A part I thought had finally died

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jer, this is SO perfect...and so full of your sensitivity...the thing I love most about your poems...
she's a very lucky girl...
stalking you with pleasure, your jm

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-03-15 05:21 PM


I hate it when I get the blues...nice writing.  James
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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3 posted 2000-03-15 05:37 PM


I think if you look, you will find many colors in your own eyes....Sometimes the best poetry comes from those blue days.  Nicely done!
mariee66
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since 2000-01-30
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Recess, OfYourMind
4 posted 2000-03-15 06:00 PM


This one just rolls smoothly~
Very nice work JML~
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2000-03-15 06:04 PM


JML--this is a SONG--a nice blues tune at that...(serenity types while listening to
Sonny Boy Williamson...)  Once again, Nice work.  Thanks.

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
6 posted 2000-03-15 06:07 PM


thank ya'll kindly...*L*
Denise
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7 posted 2000-03-15 09:04 PM


Very beautiful poem! Well done!

Denise

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
8 posted 2000-03-15 10:06 PM


JML,
This is Beautiful!!!! You did a remarkable job on this, very touching.  I loved it!! Thank you for sharing it  

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 2000-03-16 11:44 AM


This is very creative and also sad  
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