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Shadows

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Seymour Tabin
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               Shadows

I watched my shadow stretch the ground
Awake with me without a sound.
In motions that are just like mime.
And mirrored me like pantomime

It seemed to move like puppetry,
In lesser light and mimicry.
Fathered by the sun, a clone
Mothered by an objects loan.

No feel of pain, pleasure or strife
Reborn each light into new life.
Without our blood, tissue or bone.
Brought into this world full grown.

Made of shifting mediums sprawl
Transparent and in constant fall
Chameleon like abilities
With hide and seek alacrity.

An ever dark and brooding base
Light induced, but never a face.

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1 posted 03-15-2000 09:06 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this, Seymour... our companion that never feels our fears even though it joins us in our dances of joy...
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 03-15-2000 09:24 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Suthern,
Loved your wonderful comment. *L* Sy
Michael
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3 posted 03-15-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow, Sy.  That last line is a stickler.  Great poem.  Very deep and meaningful,


Michael
Seymour Tabin
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Michael,
A very nice comment, thank you much. Sy
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 03-15-2000 01:23 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

More to my liking, I have found
Are two shadows on the ground
Moving in a pantomime
One is his and one is mine
Lovely poem
Love ya
Liz
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Sy,
Everything you write is magically beautiful ......
Love ya,
Shannon
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If I could be your shadow
I'd follow you around
until I found that muse of yours
mine lost would be yours found

I love shadows and your poem, of course.
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Can those shadows think, ya think?
While they're floating on the brink
Of our semi-concious state?
Can they see us and relate?

Although their moves must be our own
Do they approve, applaud, condone?
Or do they frown and just endure?
Only the shadow knows for sure.
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 03-15-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth, What a wonderful idea, I'm with you. Love Sy

Pepper, Thank you sweet. *L*

Martie, You can be my shadow any time. *L*

Balladeer, What you say is true, Only the shadow knows.
Poet deVine
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Wonderful! Your poetry is always thought provoking! I loved your artwork in the 'group photo'...you are such a talented man!
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Wonderful thoughts in this, Sy! Wonderful responses too!

Denise
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S~
I think a little minor tune-up is needed with this one. Example, in the first stanza you write
I watched my shadow stretch the ground
Awake with me without a sound.
In motions that are just like mime.
And mirrored me like pantomime

I think it might be rewritten

I watched my shadow stretch the ground
Awake with me without a sound.
In motions that were just like mime.
It mirrored me in pantomime

Perhaps that's just me, but I think a little tinkering with it would make a good poem even better.
best regards,
bboog


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Sy,
This is a picture of perfection, I loved it!
Seymour Tabin
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Poet deVine, Thank you on both counts. *L*

Denise, Thank you, you sweet thing. *L*

bboog, I accept the tinker and will make the change, thank you. Sy

Butterfly, Perhaps a shadow of perfection, thank you.
Nan
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Sy, even your shadow speaks words of wisdom..
 
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