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Day Drifting

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jbowie
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0 posted 03-14-2000 11:12 PM       View Profile for jbowie   Email jbowie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jbowie

Wheeling around in concentric spirals, motion seeming imperceptibly slow, fish drift among outstretched arms of buoyant plants that curl and grow towards the warmer surface waters

Wind blown waves caress the shore beyond the reach
of the water bound plants, splashing upon thirsty
reeds of late summer grass, flowing into the soil
or wisping unseen into the air

Coiling invivibly, the mist twists and turns in
breezing currents ascending the aging oak
flowing around the waving leaves that shade the
cool denizens resting below

Rolling over on his back, a young dog lays among
the few glitters of sun penetrating the generous
canopy of leaves above, thinking only of the boy
scratching his flared ears

And I, resting from a beleaguered day among the
throngs in the hard, sharp corned cement encased
city, enjoy restfully petting my dog while letting
the day float quietly away


 A real man
kisses his children goodnight
© Copyright 2000 James Bowie - All Rights Reserved
Cerenity
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1 posted 03-15-2000 09:48 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi jbowie,

This is a wonderful poem, I love the part about the dog rolling over and the boy scratching his ear and the sun filtering throught the tree,s.

Thank you for the read,

Cerenity
Nan
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There's a symbiotic relationship if I've ever seen one.....
Balladeer
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3 posted 03-15-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What a wonderful flavor this poem has. Been there, done that and your words bring it back in a wonderful way.
Denise
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4 posted 03-15-2000 11:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

James, this I think is my favorite of yours to date. WOW! What a vivid scene you have painted here!

Denise
jbowie
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5 posted 03-16-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for jbowie   Email jbowie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbowie

Cerenity- thanks and everone knows I write best when it involves a dog(check out my silliness in the prose section)

Nan- How else could it be for me?

Balladeer- dogs always pull at the heart strings

Denise- well I guess I should write some more dog poems. Thank you for the WOW
Severn
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6 posted 03-16-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

And I, resting from a beleaguered day among the
throngs in the hard, sharp corned cement encased
city, enjoy restfully petting my dog while letting
the day float quietly away


Absolutely excellent - and this ending just makes the poem. Wonderful stuff.




 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
jbowie
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7 posted 03-16-2000 10:54 PM       View Profile for jbowie   Email jbowie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbowie

severn- thanks for that reply, and you know I started off with only those four lines and said "man I need to write a poem for this"
 
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