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Sea Breeze

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 03-14-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

2div align="Center">Sea Breeze

Coconut palm is dancing, dancing
Dancing in the breeze
Heavy leaf of mango
And the old banana trees

Everything is swaying
To the rhythm of the seas
That stir the mighty ocean waves
And bring the warm sea breeze

It blows the golden of my hair
And warms my tearful face
As I prepare to leave you now
And all your charming grace

For I am homeward bound today
To a far, far colder place
And I will miss the sea breeze
And your comforting embrace

Please tell me that you'll wait for me
Please put my mind at ease
And I will come again one day
Your lonely heart to please

I'll see you in my dreams, my love
Beside the churning seas
Where everything is swaying
In the gentle ocean breeze

Coconut palm is dancing, dancing
Dancing in the breeze
Heavy leaf of mango
And the old banana trees

And everything is moving
To the rhythm of the seas

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-14-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
mariee66
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1 posted 03-14-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66

Wow~
This one just rolls off the tongue so beautifully~
Magnificent work~
(Makes me think of FL, too)
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 03-14-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

I was in Florida once and loved every minute
of it ... didn't want to leave either


Rex}<{{{{o>
Martie
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3 posted 03-14-2000 09:31 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Liz, leave taking is so full of feeling and your Mango memories are beautiful...life is so full of coming and going...that's what makes each day brand new.  Loved your poem!
jazzgal
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4 posted 03-14-2000 10:00 PM       View Profile for jazzgal   Email jazzgal   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for jazzgal

I love this poem... just paints a picture perfect day in my mind.  It reminds me of my hometown (Philippines). Wish I could be there right now... enjoying that ocean breeze.  Great poem!
Cerenity
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5 posted 03-14-2000 10:00 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi Liz,

I see you are back, missed you.
Sounds like you had a fun time and one with a lot of memories, the poem was beautiful.

Cerenity
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6 posted 03-14-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You have painted a beautiful picture, Elizabeth! Welcome home! You were missed!  

Denise
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7 posted 03-15-2000 12:39 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Welcome home Elizabeth, glad to see you back. loved your poem. Sounds like a beautiful relaxing holiday.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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8 posted 03-15-2000 12:56 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is beautiful Liz..as you are..I was so glad to see you and the Florida Passions Group...hope you got some rest and had a good time...take care of yourself..  
bboog
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9 posted 03-15-2000 01:19 AM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

Liz~
  I liked it but think you should add one word, "moving" to your last stanza, so it would read:

And everything is moving, moving
To the rhythm of the seas

But that's just me, I gues. I think it would add a nice emphasis to the movement of the piece.
best regards,
bboog
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10 posted 03-15-2000 04:17 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lizzie, my friend~
Pleasure in this little heart to see you again.  I know you've shared a time that will be remembered by friends.

Poetic perfection, as always, from your pen.
Love ya' ~*Marge*~


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RainbowGirl
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11 posted 03-15-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Safe trip back sweetheart..

HUSG
Pepper
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12 posted 03-15-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Beautiful , just like you Liz ....
We are having such a wonderful time
.... I don't want you to leave .....
This has been such a special time in my
life, being with you my darling friend
..........


[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 03-15-2000).]
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13 posted 03-15-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Oh, this is so beautiful... I could feel the breezes and smell the salt... and feel the rhythm of the waves in your words. *S* Welcome back, Elizabeth... we missed  you!
Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 03-15-2000 09:07 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
No finer tribute ever made,
And to me it will never fade.
Love Sy
hoot_owl_rn
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Liz...this is beautiful. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect   Welcome back though, we missed you in Pennsylvania  
Michael
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All I can say is "It must be nice!"  
everything here is chalky dust - yuk!

Beautiful poem, Liz


Michael
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 03-15-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I was very surprised by all the lovely responses to this poem. However, I am still in Florida, and the coconut palms are still dancing. And Pepper and I are still having a ball. I'll be back on Friday and try to catch up on reading your wonderful poetry. Thank you, dear friends.
Liz
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Elizabeth, I cannot believe I affected you so to be moved to write this poem!! I had no...huh? Whaddayamean not for me? Oops! Er, wonderful poem, Elizabeth  

It was an incredible delight having you here, Liz. Please come back....and bring Martie and Denise with you!
poetFemmeFatale
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Oh my...this takes me back to my seas...I think I have some kind of connection with the ocean...Something about the breeze, and the waters, it's like I'm in a peaceful trance.  This truly took me back, so thank you.  Maybe I should consider just moving somewhere close to the ocean, so I can stop missing it and dreaming....  
Big sighs....Your writing is better than a cruise!  
WhtDove
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Liz, you've captured a beautiful scene! I'm so glad you all got to meet    
serenity blaze
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21 posted 03-15-2000 09:11 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Perfect.
HM3
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OK, I'll have to read this again tomorrow but Friday I'm going to Galveston just because.

Great poem, I could taste the salt in the air...

 Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching...


Severn
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23 posted 03-16-2000 01:04 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Lizzy - this is so...oh...tears evoking! I'm so glad you're having a great time with Pepper...talk to you soon.

Hugs K
JamesMichael
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24 posted 03-16-2000 05:53 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice writing Elizabeth...and the location sounds wonderful and warm and relaxing.  I love to watch the palm fronds gently blowing in the wind...so peaceful and majestic.  James
 
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