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Sea Breeze |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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2div align="Center">Sea Breeze Coconut palm is dancing, dancing Dancing in the breeze Heavy leaf of mango And the old banana trees Everything is swaying To the rhythm of the seas That stir the mighty ocean waves And bring the warm sea breeze It blows the golden of my hair And warms my tearful face As I prepare to leave you now And all your charming grace For I am homeward bound today To a far, far colder place And I will miss the sea breeze And your comforting embrace Please tell me that you'll wait for me Please put my mind at ease And I will come again one day Your lonely heart to please I'll see you in my dreams, my love Beside the churning seas Where everything is swaying In the gentle ocean breeze Coconut palm is dancing, dancing Dancing in the breeze Heavy leaf of mango And the old banana trees And everything is moving To the rhythm of the seas Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-14-2000).] |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Wow~ This one just rolls off the tongue so beautifully~ Magnificent work~ (Makes me think of FL, too) Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I was in Florida once and loved every minute of it ... didn't want to leave either  Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, leave taking is so full of feeling and your Mango memories are beautiful...life is so full of coming and going...that's what makes each day brand new. Loved your poem! |
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jazzgal Junior Member
since 2000-03-07
Posts 37 |
I love this poem... just paints a picture perfect day in my mind. It reminds me of my hometown (Philippines). Wish I could be there right now... enjoying that ocean breeze. Great poem! |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, I see you are back, missed you. Sounds like you had a fun time and one with a lot of memories, the poem was beautiful. Cerenity |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You have painted a beautiful picture, Elizabeth! Welcome home! You were missed! Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Welcome home Elizabeth, glad to see you back. loved your poem. Sounds like a beautiful relaxing holiday. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is beautiful Liz..as you are..I was so glad to see you and the Florida Passions Group...hope you got some rest and had a good time...take care of yourself..  |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Liz~ I liked it but think you should add one word, "moving" to your last stanza, so it would read: And everything is moving, moving To the rhythm of the seas But that's just me, I gues. I think it would add a nice emphasis to the movement of the piece. best regards, bboog |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie, my friend~ Pleasure in this little heart to see you again. I know you've shared a time that will be remembered by friends. Poetic perfection, as always, from your pen. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Safe trip back sweetheart.. HUSG |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Beautiful , just like you Liz .... We are having such a wonderful time .... I don't want you to leave ..... This has been such a special time in my life, being with you my darling friend .......... [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 03-15-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, this is so beautiful... I could feel the breezes and smell the salt... and feel the rhythm of the waves in your words. *S* Welcome back, Elizabeth... we missed you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, No finer tribute ever made, And to me it will never fade. Love Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Liz...this is beautiful. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect Welcome back though, we missed you in Pennsylvania |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
All I can say is "It must be nice!" everything here is chalky dust - yuk! Beautiful poem, Liz Michael |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I was very surprised by all the lovely responses to this poem. However, I am still in Florida, and the coconut palms are still dancing. And Pepper and I are still having a ball. I'll be back on Friday and try to catch up on reading your wonderful poetry. Thank you, dear friends. Liz |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Elizabeth, I cannot believe I affected you so to be moved to write this poem!! I had no...huh? Whaddayamean not for me? Oops! Er, wonderful poem, Elizabeth  It was an incredible delight having you here, Liz. Please come back....and bring Martie and Denise with you! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh my...this takes me back to my seas...I think I have some kind of connection with the ocean...Something about the breeze, and the waters, it's like I'm in a peaceful trance. This truly took me back, so thank you. Maybe I should consider just moving somewhere close to the ocean, so I can stop missing it and dreaming....  Big sighs....Your writing is better than a cruise!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Liz, you've captured a beautiful scene! I'm so glad you all got to meet |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Perfect. |
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HM3 Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 169TX |
OK, I'll have to read this again tomorrow but Friday I'm going to Galveston just because. Great poem, I could taste the salt in the air... Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lizzy - this is so...oh...tears evoking! I'm so glad you're having a great time with Pepper...talk to you soon. Hugs K |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Elizabeth...and the location sounds wonderful and warm and relaxing. I love to watch the palm fronds gently blowing in the wind...so peaceful and majestic. James |
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Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
I was just in FL in November... I'm dying to go back. Your poem was very beautiful. Z |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rainbow, so nice to see you, when you are not present, you spirit leaves a void. HUSG bboog, I appreciate suggestions to my poetry, but if I add another "many" it would interrupt the flow and rhythm of this verse. I hope I did not offend you with my opinion poem, but I strongly feel that no one could improve on Marti's poetry. Hope you understand. Your friend in poetry, Liz Balladeer, It was I who was honored to meet all the poet friends of Florida. Thank you for your gracious hospitality Femme, Thanks for your wonderful comments, I appreciate your love for the sea Whtdve, It was an event to be envied, Thanks Serenity, Thanks for the "perfect" HM3, Galveston, an island retreat, home of the most wonderful shop of old maps and books. But I don't recall any palms on the beach. Have fun and thank you Severn, Thanks for the tearful response. We spoke of you often James, you give the loveliest responses, Thanks Zelda, Thank you for your kind remarks Liz |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Liz, Guess I am last to respond to this LOL...Oh well I liked it so much, I'm sending it back to the top again! This was such a beautiful poem. I felt like I was at this location and time that you describe. I live on the coast of NC and am love with the ocean too! This poem was written with sensitivity and emotion. Thanks so much for sharing with all of us. Was a pleasure to read. Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Amy, Thank you for your wonderful response. It must be nice to live in beautiful North Carolina by the sea. Glad you liked the poem Liz |
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