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Mistikman
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0 posted 03-14-2000 06:37 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mistikman

The mere sight of her
And my heart starts to race
Beating forth at quickened pace
Her elegant walk, my emotions stir
I can't help but stare
About her is an irresistible air

I hear her chuckle with glee
And my world suddenly feels whole
Instead of unbearably dull
A soft hello, directed at me
And my frail heart skips a beat
Words like sugar so wonderfully sweet

Feeling her brush past me
My knees suddenly weak
Lost in wonder, I cannot speak
A hand upon mine, it is she
I thank God for the pleasure
Of this moment to treasure

I smell her sweet, pleasing fragrance
As she calmly passes me by
Causing my emotions to fly
I am overcome by the urge to dance
She smells quite angelic
Like a drug psychedelic

I yearn for taste of her sweet kiss
But know my quest is forever doomed
Before me, her beauty has bloomed
Now in my mouth a bitter taste exists
The taste of defeat and rejection
Because I tried to show my affection



[This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 03-14-2000).]
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Poet deVine
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1 posted 03-14-2000 06:44 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You've put all your emotions into this one. It's amazing but most men do enjoy a woman's perfume as they find it intoxicating. Good job....if I had one wish in life it would be that you would have her in your life forever...  
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2 posted 03-14-2000 06:48 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

misti

everything devine said....i really enjoyed reading this! you are quite the romantic...loved the way you put so much emotion into this piece. simply lovely.

amy  

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Mistikman
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3 posted 03-14-2000 08:01 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Poet deVine- Thanks   This was my first real attempt at a somewhat romantic poem. (It still came out dark, heh, guess thats just me) Perfume is nice, I guess, but I kinda prefer the natural scent. (No, that doesnt mean no showers or deoderant, heh) I guess I'm just wierd  

Aimster- Thank you  
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4 posted 03-14-2000 08:16 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well, I thought it came out romantic. I was gonna say it sure sounds like someone is in love...great job!!
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5 posted 03-14-2000 09:25 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Mistik, this is a great poem. I can relate to being intoxicated with someone. I hope that you get her someday. Keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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6 posted 03-14-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Heh ... if you give up that easily then she will never get the chance to say ....


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7 posted 03-14-2000 09:42 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

WhtDove- Thank you  

LoveBug- Well, at her urging, I have stopped persuing her, so it is doubtful that I will ever get her, I can dream though....

Rex Allen McCoy- Thanks, but you have no idea how hard I did try for her, and how much heartache is caused both of us. She explained to me in no uncertain terms that she will never go out with me because she does not find me physically attractive, and I have a few personality defects she could live without   It happens, I guess.
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8 posted 03-14-2000 09:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful and sad. Well written.

Denise
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Mistikman ... thats too bad ... I've never been turned down when I asked a girl out ... they have always just told me to get lost before I got the question out
But I didn't get discouraged ... and am now married for 19 years ( to the same one )


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10 posted 03-15-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Rockin' well Mistikman!!!
Unrequited emotion always sucks!!!
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11 posted 03-15-2000 03:53 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mistik~
You pour out emotions with such loving care.
Someday, my friend ... you will find the one who looks into your heart and sees the makings of a kind and loving man.
When it happens ... and it will ...
you will know the love that can change
your life and the life of another.
~*Marge*~





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Michael
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12 posted 03-15-2000 09:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You know - rejection ought to be a four letter word.  There is nothing that hurt's worse in the world I think.  My heart goes to ya, bud.  You express the pain and frustration well.


Michael
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13 posted 03-15-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Denise- Thank you  


Rex Allen McCoy- LOL, heh, guess its better that way though, at least you dont look as dumb cuz you never did ask.

Christopher- Thanks, and indeed it does...

Marge Tindal- Oh I hope so, but I so want it to be her, but I know that will never happen.   Thanks for reading.

Michael- 4 letters wasnt enough to express the pain, so it was extended to 9. Rejection in itself isnt that bad, its only bad when you have very strong feelings for the other person. Thanks for reading.
 
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