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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
The mere sight of her And my heart starts to race Beating forth at quickened pace Her elegant walk, my emotions stir I can't help but stare About her is an irresistible air I hear her chuckle with glee And my world suddenly feels whole Instead of unbearably dull A soft hello, directed at me And my frail heart skips a beat Words like sugar so wonderfully sweet Feeling her brush past me My knees suddenly weak Lost in wonder, I cannot speak A hand upon mine, it is she I thank God for the pleasure Of this moment to treasure I smell her sweet, pleasing fragrance As she calmly passes me by Causing my emotions to fly I am overcome by the urge to dance She smells quite angelic Like a drug psychedelic I yearn for taste of her sweet kiss But know my quest is forever doomed Before me, her beauty has bloomed Now in my mouth a bitter taste exists The taste of defeat and rejection Because I tried to show my affection [This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 03-14-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You've put all your emotions into this one. It's amazing but most men do enjoy a woman's perfume as they find it intoxicating. Good job....if I had one wish in life it would be that you would have her in your life forever...  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
misti everything devine said....i really enjoyed reading this! you are quite the romantic...loved the way you put so much emotion into this piece. simply lovely. amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Poet deVine- Thanks This was my first real attempt at a somewhat romantic poem. (It still came out dark, heh, guess thats just me) Perfume is nice, I guess, but I kinda prefer the natural scent. (No, that doesnt mean no showers or deoderant, heh) I guess I'm just wierd Aimster- Thank you |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well, I thought it came out romantic. I was gonna say it sure sounds like someone is in love...great job!! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Mistik, this is a great poem. I can relate to being intoxicated with someone. I hope that you get her someday. Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Heh ... if you give up that easily then she will never get the chance to say .... Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
WhtDove- Thank you LoveBug- Well, at her urging, I have stopped persuing her, so it is doubtful that I will ever get her, I can dream though.... Rex Allen McCoy- Thanks, but you have no idea how hard I did try for her, and how much heartache is caused both of us. She explained to me in no uncertain terms that she will never go out with me because she does not find me physically attractive, and I have a few personality defects she could live without It happens, I guess. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful and sad. Well written. Denise |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Mistikman ... thats too bad ... I've never been turned down when I asked a girl out ... they have always just told me to get lost before I got the question out But I didn't get discouraged ... and am now married for 19 years ( to the same one ) Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Rockin' well Mistikman!!! Unrequited emotion always sucks!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mistik~ You pour out emotions with such loving care. Someday, my friend ... you will find the one who looks into your heart and sees the makings of a kind and loving man. When it happens ... and it will ... you will know the love that can change your life and the life of another. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know - rejection ought to be a four letter word. There is nothing that hurt's worse in the world I think. My heart goes to ya, bud. You express the pain and frustration well. Michael |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Denise- Thank you Rex Allen McCoy- LOL, heh, guess its better that way though, at least you dont look as dumb cuz you never did ask. Christopher- Thanks, and indeed it does... Marge Tindal- Oh I hope so, but I so want it to be her, but I know that will never happen.  Thanks for reading.Michael- 4 letters wasnt enough to express the pain, so it was extended to 9. Rejection in itself isnt that bad, its only bad when you have very strong feelings for the other person. Thanks for reading. |
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