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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-14-2000 01:29 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

Along shores of windswept time
Far away from my conscious mind
Lies a place of virgin grace
Where water sparkles a vintage wine

There I am to cleanse my soul
Torn apart by this growing hole
Its light devoured by night
Heeding not the thing it stole

Time is short and fading fast
Descending from now unto the past
And in this place of virgin grace
I wish that time could last

Unto this place I speed along
Seeing all, and what went wrong
Taking bits of me from reality,
Until I am totally gone


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Nate Dogg
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1 posted 03-14-2000 02:06 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

This is a very good piece! It definitely swept me away!

 Nathan
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2 posted 03-14-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, I liked the rhyme scheme as well!

Denise
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-14-2000 03:45 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

There I am to cleanse my soul
Torn apart by this growing hole
Its light devoured by night
Heeding not the thing it stole
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Unto this place I speed along
Seeing all, and what went wrong
Taking bits of me from reality,
Until I am totally gone

wow i love this poem...the flow of it catches you and runs with you...and the emotion of it speaks volumes to me...
stalking you until your gone
your jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


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4 posted 03-14-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This is just beautiful...wistful and expressive...Nice work, dawlin'.
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