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LunarFlame
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0 posted 03-13-2000 09:58 PM       View Profile for LunarFlame   Email LunarFlame   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit LunarFlame's Home Page   View IP for LunarFlame

Lost is my heart and part of my soul,
my life is so shattered, my emotions are cold.
the core of my life is hidden so well,
surrounded by layers of personal hell.
Secrets and dreams kept in seclusion,
my existance, no more that a simple illusion.
to have been noticed in this world and appreciated
would have given me a life less isolated.

they think they really understand my feelings,
but none of them see the real pain im conceiling.
too occupied with their own to care about me,
ill wait until they suffer, then i will succeed.

I'd rather be liked for more than appearance,
my talent, my courage or being so fearless.
Im hoping one day they will open their eyes,
they'll see my real beauty, my beauty inside



 8oř much luv and marshmallows,
LunarFlame(LF)
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Denise
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1 posted 03-13-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

The pain is evident in this. Sometimes we have to open up and make people listen to the pain we are feeling. It's not healthy to live in a shell for very long. You have expressed a sad situation very well.

Denise
Cerenity
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2 posted 03-14-2000 09:20 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi LunarFlame,

I really like the lines, surrounded by personal hell, and cold emotions.
Very nice poem thanks for the read,

Cerenity


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[This message has been edited by Cerenity-1 (edited 03-14-2000).]
 
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