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Phire New Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 2Anderson, South Carolina, USA |
The darkness of the day Slowly fades away Falling to the wonderful light Of a beautiful night But the beauty of the stars Shining from afar Lights in the sky made dim by your eyes Dancing in the rain My love you would gain From the first night alone with you I knew I couldn't live without you From the first kiss Ours was a love filled with bliss It was all so perfect And even now I know it was worth it Everything I was to gain Would far outweigh the pain Now you're lost Never to fade away like the cold morning frost Forever I thought I would mourn No other love to ever be born Now the thought of you Pushes me to continue Life without you is such a hassle But I know, one day we'll share a castle And I'll play this game till I win Just to see your smile again |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
First of all... Welcome to Passions!  And second of all, this is a lovely poem. It rhymes too; that's a feat for me and so applause for another talented poet joining the ranks of Passions. We'd do anything to see someone special smile. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Phire New Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 2Anderson, South Carolina, USA |
Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate any and all criticism, and I look forward to posting and reading here in the future. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Check your email... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Phire! This is a wonderful, touching poem! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Phire~ Lovely opening act. Welcome to Passion's. Look forward to Act II. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Beautiful poem, Phire Very well written with a wonderful sense of feeling behind it -molly aka sam p.s. you know-you can make a profile for youself if you'd like to by clicking on the word "members" at the top of the screen and you can check out other people's profiles by clicking on the far left icon that looks like paper and a quill pen in the blue bar by each person's name. just thought I'd let you know. OH! And welcome to Passions Poetry "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide |
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