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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Fatal Fatal flares Explore our brains As lethal dares Destroy our veins While gun shot wounds Cause pain and trial We ourselves Are in denial We again Corrode Corruption While we bathe In crude abductions Many people Many places Die behind our Hollow faces. "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
This is excellent, I liked the way you expressed this poem. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree. Powerful writing. Well done! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sam~ Quite a powerful poem. Well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I agree with the others. Very good writing. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This truly is a very powerful piece. There is a very good lesson in this also. Excellent work! Marina |
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Miss.Queeny Junior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 22 |
What can I say that they haven't ? This is a great poem, very powerful and truthful. Love, Peace and Apathy...MISS xxx |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Sam!! You have captured it all in this one. . .very powerful and to the point! --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Molly, this is so well versed~ What a great and forceful piece~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I gotta be an echo here...with powerful and well done. |
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