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MyPenNameIsSam
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0 posted 03-13-2000 05:44 PM       View Profile for MyPenNameIsSam   Email MyPenNameIsSam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MyPenNameIsSam

Fatal


Fatal flares
Explore our brains
As lethal dares
Destroy our veins
While gun shot wounds
Cause pain and trial
We ourselves
Are in denial
We again
Corrode Corruption
While we bathe
In crude abductions
Many people
Many places
Die behind our
Hollow faces.

 "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide

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1 posted 03-13-2000 05:52 PM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

This is excellent, I liked the way you expressed this poem.
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2 posted 03-13-2000 08:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree. Powerful writing. Well done!

Denise
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Sam~
Quite a powerful poem.
Well done.
~*Marge*~


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I agree with the others.  Very good writing.
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5 posted 03-14-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

This truly is a very powerful piece. There is a very good lesson in this also. Excellent work!

Marina
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What can I say that they haven't ? This is a great poem, very powerful and truthful.

Love, Peace and Apathy...MISS xxx
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7 posted 03-14-2000 08:56 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent Sam!!

You have captured it all in this one. . .very powerful and to the point!

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8 posted 03-14-2000 09:15 PM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66

Molly, this is so well versed~
What a great and forceful piece~
Marie~


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And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

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9 posted 03-14-2000 09:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I gotta be an echo here...with powerful and well done.
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