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On a Thursday

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Martie
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On a Thursday

It was twenty years ago
on a Thursday
of a summer evening
when couples stroll
and jasmine perfumes the air.

Laughter stole over backyard fences
and windows were open and lit with family
when you took my hand
and softened my lips with your eyes.

I remember you said something
with your heart
that was so full of your expression
that the caress of sound
feathered across me
and I breathed deeply
to taste your scent.

The corners curved around you
like the slivered moon,
and the street lights
made our shadows melt together
in provocative prediction.

I was so wounded with the sting
of a poisoned past
and so hungry to fill the void
left by time’s change
that I thought my meaning
might be in you.

And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly.

Now,  
it is Thursday
and spring is almost here
when sweet peas
in rainbow dresses
scent the air,
and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons.

I watch in reverence
as the night ascends around us,
chills the air where I gather
and turns me towards
your warm encircling

where flying is free
and I can still grow me.
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
PoeticKnight
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1 posted 03-13-2000 05:30 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

You are really great at painting a picture with words. The visuals were outstanding, such a beautiful poem.
Mike
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2 posted 03-13-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Each time I am fortunate enough to read one of your poems, I think to myself, could she possibly write any more beautiful?  I think you have boxed yourself in a corner on this one my friend.  Like to see you try and top this one, truly wonderful poetry.
Denise
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3 posted 03-13-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree! I think this one is the best you have ever written! BRAVO!!

Denise
Janet Marie
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4 posted 03-13-2000 07:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

this is exceptional...sweetly full of  memories and emotional imagery.
take care jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


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5 posted 03-13-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW Martie, this is beautiful, it's brilliant excellent and more. Loved the picture you painted.
and spring is almost here
             when sweet peas
             in rainbow dresses
             scent the air,
             and sunsets draw the sky
             with melted crayons.

Beautiful.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Nan
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6 posted 03-13-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

"Where flying is free/And I can still grow me"

I'm smilin'...
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 03-13-2000 10:40 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
To find Thursday on a Monday is to start the week off right.

'and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons'

You DID watch the sunset with me last night, didn't you.  That's EXACTLY what it looked like.  You are amazing !
This is beautiful as always  ...
as always.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 03-13-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Martie, I doubt if you could write out a grocery list without it becoming a beautiful poem. You are AWESOME!
Martie
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9 posted 03-14-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

JML--thanks for liking the paint

Mike--Sounds like a challange--thank you

Denise--Wow, thank you.

Janet Marie--I'm glad you liked it

Dark Angel--I appreciate you reading my work and for the wow

Nan--glad I made you smile  

Marge--of course I did

Balladeer--A grocery list--another chalange--maybe and thanks for such a compliment.
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