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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2000-03-13 05:24 PM

On a Thursday

It was twenty years ago
on a Thursday
of a summer evening
when couples stroll
and jasmine perfumes the air.

Laughter stole over backyard fences
and windows were open and lit with family
when you took my hand
and softened my lips with your eyes.

I remember you said something
with your heart
that was so full of your expression
that the caress of sound
feathered across me
and I breathed deeply
to taste your scent.

The corners curved around you
like the slivered moon,
and the street lights
made our shadows melt together
in provocative prediction.

I was so wounded with the sting
of a poisoned past
and so hungry to fill the void
left by time’s change
that I thought my meaning
might be in you.

And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly.

Now,
it is Thursday
and spring is almost here
when sweet peas
in rainbow dresses
scent the air,
and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons.

I watch in reverence
as the night ascends around us,
chills the air where I gather
and turns me towards
your warm encircling

where flying is free
and I can still grow me.

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

1 posted 2000-03-13 05:30 PM

You are really great at painting a picture with words. The visuals were outstanding, such a beautiful poem.

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

2 posted 2000-03-13 05:34 PM

Each time I am fortunate enough to read one of your poems, I think to myself, could she possibly write any more beautiful? I think you have boxed yourself in a corner on this one my friend. Like to see you try and top this one, truly wonderful poetry.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-03-13 06:12 PM

I agree! I think this one is the best you have ever written! BRAVO!!

Denise

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-03-13 07:10 PM

this is exceptional...sweetly full of memories and emotional imagery.
take care jm

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2000-03-13 07:18 PM

WOW Martie, this is beautiful, it's brilliant excellent and more. Loved the picture you painted.
and spring is almost here
             when sweet peas
             in rainbow dresses
             scent the air,
             and sunsets draw the sky
             with melted crayons.

Beautiful.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 2000-03-13 07:42 PM

"Where flying is free/And I can still grow me"

I'm smilin'...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2000-03-13 10:40 PM

Martie~
To find Thursday on a Monday is to start the week off right.

'and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons'

You DID watch the sunset with me last night, didn't you. That's EXACTLY what it looked like. You are amazing !
This is beautiful as always ...
as always.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

8 posted 2000-03-13 10:45 PM

Martie, I doubt if you could write out a grocery list without it becoming a beautiful poem. You are AWESOME!

Martie

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Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2000-03-14 10:51 AM

JML--thanks for liking the paint

Mike--Sounds like a challange--thank you

Denise--Wow, thank you.

Janet Marie--I'm glad you liked it

Dark Angel--I appreciate you reading my work and for the wow

Nan--glad I made you smile

Marge--of course I did

Balladeer--A grocery list--another chalange--maybe and thanks for such a compliment.

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