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Open Poetry #6

The White Tower

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-13 10:52 AM

Across a desert
I see a white tower
Rising up to Heaven
Against a cobalt sky
My eyes turned red
From tears of gratitude
And the wind began to howl
Furiously around me
As I knelt at the sight
So many miles
So many years away
Finally I see my destination
Treasure of which I sought
Relic of ancient time
Could it finally be true?
Just as I raise my hands
To the sky in thanks
A cloud passes over the white tower
A chill crosses my heart
With desperate fear
I run towards the sight
Limbs shaking every step
‘til I drop from exhaustion
Face down in sand
Mind a waste, unable to move
Gradually falling into nightmarish sleep
And when I wake I see
Nothing

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-13 02:50 PM

As I knelt at the sight
So many miles
So many years away
Finally I see my destination
Treasure of which I sought
Relic of ancient time
Could it finally be true?
Just as I raise my hands
To the sky in thanks
A cloud passes over the white tower
A chill crosses my heart
With desperate fear
I run towards the sight
Limbs shaking every step
‘til I drop from exhaustion
Face down in sand
Mind a waste, unable to move

this ones imagery is perfect,
as are the emotions...desperation in the sand...I like it

your devoted stalker,
jm

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-03-13 03:18 PM

I love this...very stirring. James

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-03-13 06:19 PM

Excellent writing, JML! Great imagery!

Denise

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