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mete out
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0 posted 03-13-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mete out


I feel as if this is my ultimate deadline,
That if I don't stop hurting now, I will hurt  
  forever,
These tears, these scars, this anger can no longer  
  pass for emotion;
They are weaknessess.
By now I should be in control of myself,
By now I should be able to smile.
All I feel is frustration at this pathetic excuse for writing,
Why has it left me?
I am engulfed by pain and fear-
But in a time when all I should feel is joy and
  comfort.
I feel like I'm leaning on you too hard,
But I don't want to tell you for fear that you'll  
  agree
And pull me off and let me drop.
I'm so scared of hurting you.
I can't bear the thought of being the weight on
  your shoulders,
Or of being the one who holds you back.
I want to, need to, HAVE to get through this ,
But, again, I am scared; of what I will become,
Will I be me if this pain lessens?
Will I be me if these scars fade?
Will I be me if I feel,(dare I say it), content?

This is it.
If I make this milestone I can be here for you as
  you have been for me,
But if I don't
I might as well say goodbye,
Because being with me will be a walking nightmare,
I'll be a disease you wish you could leave far below,

But I will try (not cry),
And with you by my side,
I will make it.


I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


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AnthonyEV1
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since 03-05-2000
Posts 17
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1 posted 03-13-2000 08:48 AM       View Profile for AnthonyEV1   Email AnthonyEV1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit AnthonyEV1's Home Page   View IP for AnthonyEV1

That was a good poem, a sad one, but still good. You have defenatly not lost your touch for writting, I can tell you that right now. And I'm sure anyone else that reads your poetry feels the same. ((gives you a hug)) I hope everything going on in your life gets better for you.

 Just can't live that negative way...make way for the positive day"-Bob Marley.

"When the rain falls, it doesnt just fall on one man"-Bob Marley.

"" - Bob Marley
Enola
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since 02-11-2000
Posts 138
England


2 posted 03-13-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

I really don't know what to say, every poem of yours I read contains the same brutal honesty and excellent expression, which is why your work is so compelling.  The last stanza is probably the most truthful.  

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 03-13-2000 10:32 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh, this is so sad  
mete out
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4 posted 03-13-2000 11:54 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Anthony,
Thankyou for your words.
It helps to know I have friends here.    

***Enola,
Everything you say about my poetry is what I think of yours.
Your replies always brighten my day as you seem to delve so deep.
Thankyou.   :

*Hoot,
It is true, this poem is sad, but know that writing is an invaluable aide.
Thanks for your support.    



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 02-14-2000
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5 posted 03-13-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

boo(hi and hello is boring)

"the wonders never cease"with you lou.today i have been thinking the same thing today(if i start to be happy,do i have the right to feel i am me?)i think that the answer is that we have every right to be bloody happy . after all ,weve both felt so bad for so long .i am so proud to be able to call you my friend . you understand me and everything i feel so much more than anyone else i have ever known.
i thought of an ace quote today:
"were off to see the wizard,the wonderfull wizard of oz" . maybe one day we will be .
love eternal
cabes
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 03-06-2000
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6 posted 03-13-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

As I read this I began to wonder when I had left the door to my soul open....You echo so many of the thoughts that run through my mind especially right now...today in fact.  I'm stunned and I'm touched by the words that I understand so well.  I used to curse the people that made me who I am today but now I wonder who I would be if I let it all go a scary realization.  Thank you for sharing your words of truth.
mete out
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7 posted 03-15-2000 09:18 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Cabes,
Your words are always so touching.
It is me who should be proud to know you...you really have been an inspiration to me Cable, the best friend a girl (or boy, or dog, or pot of jam) could ever have.
Thankyou so much Cabey.
Love Lou xxx  
p.s....we WILL meet the wizard...!

***Butterflies,
It brings me great comfort to know that you share my feelings and can relate to my words.
I too used to regret the way people changed my life, seemingly for the worse, but, looking back on it, I probably would never have started writing if I didn't feel so bad, and if that were the case I would never have come across such beautiful people such as yourself.
Thanks for your support, Lou.

 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.
 
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