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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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She wears the armor of modern life, that cloaks the truth and dims the light, keeping busy, guard up and ready, but it all falls apart every night, he’s in her heart, pierces her dreams sadly, though, its never enough, she’s cast her meaningless lot in life, it’s collecting like marshmallow fluff, sticky, sickly, sweet on her tongue, she can’t escape this image of self, blind to this genuine offer of love, her slow demise of spiritual wealth is costing her the rarest of gifts, is not a gift if she can’t see it. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Wow ! This is powerfully done. I envy the talent. I doubt the venom rests in you ... but you've seen that it rests somewhere, with someone. Very, very well done, my dear. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ah, very sad when one is too afraid or too busy for love.....what then is life? Excellent writing Corinne! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
another excellent piece of work, Corinne. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is a powerful piece you've got here Corinne...I especially liked the marshmallow fluff!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Corinne,I read your stuff and always run out of things to say...you are truly talented! Another excellent poem. Marina |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Marge, you are a kindred spirit and poet, my friend, and too kind, too! Thank you, Denise, Balladeer, Devina, Marina! Corinne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Yep - here I am again thinking how wonderful your writing truly is... haunting - it truly is haunting.  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Severn, why thank you, kind poet! You're no slouch yourself in that department! Corinne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Mirror, mirror on the wall, You are fair after all. Just close your eyes to the fetish, And you will have your lovely wish. *L* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very powerful work Corinne |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed.... So let's go another round with it...  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Seymour (cute poem reply, btw!), Hoot and Nan! Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
So let me re interpret this poem, She wears cloaks, that fall apart every night of marshmallow fluff, sticky, sweet on the tongue this genuine offer of love. I can taste this candy already, poetry is such an interpetive sport. Parker |
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