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Corinne
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0 posted 03-13-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne


She wears the armor of modern life,
that cloaks the truth and dims the light,
keeping busy, guard up and ready,
but it all falls apart every night,

heís in her heart, pierces her dreams
sadly, though, its never enough,
sheís cast her meaningless lot in life,
itís collecting like marshmallow fluff,

sticky, sickly, sweet on her tongue,
she canít escape this image of self,
blind to this genuine offer of love,
her slow demise of spiritual wealth

is costing her the rarest of gifts,
is not a gift if she canít see it.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 03-13-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne~
Wow !  This is powerfully done.
I envy the talent.
I doubt the venom rests in you ...
but you've seen that it rests somewhere,
with someone.
Very, very well done, my dear.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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2 posted 03-13-2000 01:04 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ah, very sad when one is too afraid or too busy for love.....what then is life? Excellent writing Corinne!

Denise
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3 posted 03-13-2000 01:09 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

another excellent piece of work, Corinne.
devina
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4 posted 03-13-2000 01:33 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is a powerful piece you've got here Corinne...I especially liked the marshmallow fluff!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Marina
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5 posted 03-13-2000 01:41 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Corinne,I read your stuff and always run out of things to say...you are truly talented! Another excellent poem.

Marina
Corinne
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6 posted 03-13-2000 01:57 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Marge, you are a kindred spirit and poet, my friend, and too kind, too!

Thank you, Denise, Balladeer, Devina, Marina!

Corinne
Severn
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7 posted 03-13-2000 06:09 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Yep - here I am again thinking how wonderful your writing truly is...
haunting - it truly is haunting.

K


 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Corinne
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8 posted 03-13-2000 10:00 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Severn,

why thank you, kind poet! You're no slouch yourself in that department!

Corinne
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9 posted 03-13-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Corinne,
Mirror, mirror on the wall,
You are fair after all.
Just close your eyes to the fetish,
And you will have your lovely wish.
*L*  
hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 03-13-2000 10:15 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very powerful work Corinne  
Nan
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11 posted 03-13-2000 07:31 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Indeed.... So let's go another round with it...
Corinne
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12 posted 03-13-2000 09:19 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Seymour (cute poem reply, btw!), Hoot and Nan!

Cor
Parker
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13 posted 03-16-2000 01:18 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

So let me re interpret this poem,

She wears cloaks,
that fall apart every night
of marshmallow fluff,
sticky, sweet on the tongue
this genuine offer of love.

I can taste this candy already,
poetry is such an interpetive
sport.

Parker
 
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