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Letting Go
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Letting Go |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
Rivers of tears run down my cheeks, I taste the salty liquid upon my lips. Forever falling and then colliding To the hardness of the floor, Splashing in the ready made Puddle of broken dreams. Through cloudy eyes, tears run dry. I've emptied out my tomb. Collapsed by exhaustion Falling broke to the floor, Laying in the residue of Elusive dreams. Reluctant to leave this bed of tears, I gather myself up from the floor. Breathing release and then relief, With things in perspective, My mind free to reason, At last I can finally rest. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
WOW! this one was filled with lots and lots of deep emotion. I too have felt like this from time to time. Sometimes a good cry is exactly what we need! Kudos to you for posting this as well as getting through this hurtle in your life! Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Shelley~ This is just wonderful emotions on the page. 'Laying in the residue of Elusive dreams' The river of regret is filled with the tears of loss. It flows to it's crest and then recedes to a navigable level. Hoping you have seen it crest and can now navigate freely. Wonderful writing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Release and then relief.....that is the way...this is so full of pain and yet with a touch of hope. Denise |
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Bang New Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 6 |
My mind free to reason, At last I can finally rest. I hope that I too reach this point Bang |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
Amy, Thanks for your response. I find no shame in a good cry as long as it pushes my forward. Marge, Thank you for your kind words. The river has crested, now to get the courage to navigate freely to a new course. Denise, Release and relief leaves room to grow, sometimes painful but worth it if you wish to better yourself. Bang, With the power of your pen I'm sure you too will reach a "new shade of being" Lots of smiles here!! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Shelley, this is really good poetry. The feeling of it is so vivid. Welcome back, haven't heard from you in a while. |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
Thanks for the compiment Danny. Its greatly appreciated! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Shelley, Sometimes, you have to get up and face the dawn. . . and in that, there is the strength. . . Welcome back, by the way. . .we've missed you!! ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
What a beautiful poem~ I, too, have felt that pain~ It is the worst a heart could feel~ Time and hope heals all~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
What a feeling... it's always somehow refreshing, as you've mentioned here to cry so hard that you feel you can't breathe and get all the tears out that are available within you... but it can be so painful and almost more painful if you feel the pain yet can't cry. You seem to be feeling better though... able to "reason" and "finally rest",... Beautiful poem as well -molly aka sam "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
ERRRRRRR# LETTING GO WHY CAN'T IT BE EASIER? CAN ANYONE ANSWER? ANYWAY THIS WAS A GOOD POEM AND I COMPLETLY UNDERSTAND WHERE UR COMING FROM GLAD TO SEE YOUR MIND IS FREE TO REASON AND U CAN REST (IM NOT THERE YET BUT HOPING SOON TO BE) |
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