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Letting Go

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Shelley
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0 posted 03-12-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Shelley

Rivers of tears run down my cheeks,
I taste the salty liquid upon my lips.
Forever falling and then colliding
To the hardness of the floor,
Splashing in the ready made
Puddle of broken dreams.

Through cloudy eyes, tears run dry.
I've emptied out my tomb.
Collapsed by exhaustion
Falling broke to the floor,
Laying in the residue of
Elusive dreams.

Reluctant to leave this bed of tears,
I gather myself up from the floor.
Breathing release and then relief,
With things in perspective,
My mind free to reason,
At last I can finally rest.

© Copyright 2000 Shelley Monastra - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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1 posted 03-13-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

WOW! this one was filled with lots and lots of deep emotion. I too have felt like this from time to time. Sometimes a good cry is exactly what we need! Kudos to you for posting this as well as getting through this hurtle in your life!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 03-13-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Shelley~
This is just wonderful emotions on the page.

'Laying in the residue of
Elusive dreams'

The river of regret is filled with the tears of loss.  It flows to it's crest and then recedes to a navigable level.
Hoping you have seen it crest and can now navigate freely.
Wonderful writing.
~*Marge*~


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Denise
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3 posted 03-13-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Release and then relief.....that is the way...this is so full of pain and yet with a touch of hope.

Denise
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4 posted 03-13-2000 03:34 AM       View Profile for Bang   Email Bang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bang

My mind free to reason,
At last I can finally rest.

I hope that I too reach this point

Bang
Shelley
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5 posted 03-13-2000 09:57 AM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

Amy,
Thanks for your response. I find no shame in a good cry as long as it pushes my forward.

Marge,
Thank you for your kind words.
The river has crested, now to get the courage to navigate freely to a new course.

Denise,
Release and relief leaves room to grow, sometimes painful but worth it if you wish to better yourself.

Bang,
With the power of your pen I'm sure you too will reach a "new shade of being"


Lots of smiles here!!

Danny Holloway
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6 posted 03-13-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Shelley, this is really good poetry. The feeling of it is so vivid.  Welcome back, haven't heard from you in a while.
Shelley
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7 posted 03-13-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

Thanks for the compiment Danny.
Its greatly appreciated!
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8 posted 03-13-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Shelley,

Sometimes, you have to get up and face the dawn. . . and in that, there is the strength. . .

Welcome back, by the way. . .we've missed you!!

-----------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

mariee66
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9 posted 03-14-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66

What a beautiful poem~
I, too, have felt that pain~
It is the worst a heart could feel~
Time and hope heals all~
Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

MyPenNameIsSam
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10 posted 03-14-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for MyPenNameIsSam   Email MyPenNameIsSam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MyPenNameIsSam

What a feeling... it's always somehow refreshing, as you've mentioned here to cry so hard that you feel you can't breathe and get all the tears out that are available within you... but it can be so painful and almost more painful if you feel the pain yet can't cry.  You seem to be feeling better though... able to "reason" and "finally rest",... Beautiful poem as well  
-molly aka sam

 "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide

just_another_fe
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11 posted 03-14-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for just_another_fe   Email just_another_fe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit just_another_fe's Home Page   View IP for just_another_fe

ERRRRRRR# LETTING GO    WHY CAN'T IT BE EASIER? CAN ANYONE ANSWER? ANYWAY THIS WAS A GOOD POEM AND I COMPLETLY UNDERSTAND WHERE UR COMING FROM GLAD TO SEE YOUR MIND IS FREE TO REASON AND U CAN REST (IM NOT THERE YET BUT HOPING SOON TO BE)
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