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Blue Eyes |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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Blue Eyes There once was a man, like any other man, On a snug midautumn's night, His eyes were blue, a blue so true, That reflected the moon's pale light. There was something, Oh! something, in this man's mind, Something that drove him to shame, Perhaps twas a death, or money miskept, Or maybe a love untamed, Yet I cannot say, In any concievable way, Where this man may be, He may be at sea, or beneath a grand tree, but not in this country, probably, I'm afraid that, Oh no! I just dont know, What frame of time he's in, It's just not clear, as to what exact year, With a memory of mine so thin, I also know not the friends he's got, Nor do I know his name, Nor do I know where he wants to go, And perhaps he feels the same, All things said, Alas! I know not, But a few things I know are right, He was a man, like any simple man, On a true midautumn's night, His eyes were blue, a sapphire blue! And thats all my rememberance has led, Oh, and that something, Oh! something, In this man's thoughts, that gave him a chilling dread, And I cant, at last, rule out the fact, That he might quite possibly be dead. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Magnificent!!!!!! I loved this, I read it twice to be sure I hadn't missed anything  A refreshing walk with words that painted such a vivid picture. Thank you for posting!! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've told quite a story with this one...breathtaking as it was!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Imaginative and whimsical, EagleScorpion. This piece would be exceptional with just a few typo corrections and perhaps reconstructing into separate stanzas. Wonderful writing, nonetheless. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
EagleS~ This is mysteriously intriguing. Where did he go? Got me to wondering. You've served the purpose well. I liked the way it flowed. Made for a wonderful out-loud read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Chilling! Well done! Denise |
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