How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #6 Archive
 Blue Eyes
 1 2 3 4 5
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Blue Eyes

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
EagleScorpion
Senior Member
since 03-08-2000
Posts 1705
Here, Now, Forever


0 posted 03-12-2000 10:58 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for EagleScorpion

Blue Eyes

There once was a man, like any other man,
On a snug midautumn's night,
His eyes were blue, a blue so true,
That reflected the moon's pale light.
There was something, Oh! something,
in this man's mind,
Something that drove him to shame,
Perhaps twas a death, or money miskept,
Or maybe a love untamed,
Yet I cannot say, In any concievable way,
Where this man may be,
He may be at sea, or beneath a grand tree,
but not in this country, probably,
I'm afraid that, Oh no! I just dont know,
What frame of time he's in,
It's just not clear, as to what exact year,
With a memory of mine so thin,
I also know not the friends he's got,
Nor do I know his name,
Nor do I know where he wants to go,
And perhaps he feels the same,
All things said, Alas! I know not,
But a few things I know are right,
He was a man, like any simple man,
On a true midautumn's night,
His eyes were blue, a sapphire blue!
And thats all my rememberance has led,
Oh, and that something, Oh! something,
In this man's thoughts,
that gave him a chilling dread,
And I cant, at last, rule out the fact,
That he might quite possibly be dead.


© Copyright 2000 Joseph Alexander Knob - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 03-06-2000
Posts 3768
Michigan


1 posted 03-12-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Magnificent!!!!!!  I loved this, I read it twice to be sure I hadn't missed anything   A refreshing walk with words that painted such a vivid picture.  Thank you for posting!!
devina
Member Elite
since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


2 posted 03-12-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've told quite a story with this one...breathtaking as it was!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 12-27-1999
Posts 3317


3 posted 03-12-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Imaginative and whimsical, EagleScorpion. This piece would be exceptional with just a few typo corrections and perhaps reconstructing into separate stanzas. Wonderful writing, nonetheless.  

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 11-06-1999
Posts 43042
Florida's Foreverly Shores


4 posted 03-12-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

EagleS~
This is mysteriously intriguing.
Where did he go?  Got me to wondering.
You've served the purpose well.
I liked the way it flowed.
Made for a wonderful out-loud read.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


5 posted 03-12-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Chilling! Well done!

Denise
 
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #6 >> Blue Eyes Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors