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Franni Junior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 39 |
My friend Anna's daddy Had two fingers on his left hand, A red scar on his tawny cheek. My father held my hand tight As we watched him cut firewood With his rusty circular saw. I never saw Anna's mom, But that day the curtain moved And I knew she was peeping out. The cottage was so small. I'm not sure Anna had a room Of her own. Each time the blade hit a log, I jumped, squeezing my father's hand. Sharp teeth in harsh vibrato Screamed out high notes Then dropping a harmonic third Releasing the wood, Singing the same eerie theme Over and over again; Chips were flying. Father looked me straight in the eye And said, "You must never Come here without mom or me. This is a very dangerous place!" I nodded. I understood. So Anna came down the alley To play on my jungle gym, To catch baby horned toads, Then put them to bed in my dollhouse. We would swing double To the rhythms of distant Whining saws. Anna would go home When she wanted to. One day when I was alone My mom sent me to the store One block away for candy. Returning home I went the long way. I heard no sounds of saws, Walked down the alley Past Anna's house, Looking for her. On arriving home Mother stood Switch in hand and Pulling another off the elm. The sting on my calves Was like nothing I had Known or felt before. Red welts and streaks Burned all night. I did not understand Mother's desperation. I did not know until I was older of a danger Beyond the saws, Of Anna's mom and a butcher knife, Or about that scar On her daddy's cheek. Franni |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A heartwrenching story so well written ...... Exquisite piece Fran ..... Love You, Pepper A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Superb writing from a lovely poetess. I was so glad to see this talent on display. Well done, dear friend, Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Franni~ This is just awesome writing. What a wonderful Sunday morning treat. You must come more often. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Franni This is one of those works that defies any description short of "poignant"... It's nice to see you post - whenever we can get you here...  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow...scary story....I like this a lot.. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This was a captivating read, Franni. Well done! Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A chilling story told very well!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Franni, The wonder of your work painted in such vivid words, took a minute out of my life I shall not forget. *L* Sy |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Shaking off those chills! Great to see you post! Very chilling story! |
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Franni Junior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 39 |
Thank you everyone for the wonderful support and encouragement. This is a great group. The feed back and responses meant a lot. Franni |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW!! Franni...this is an excellent piece of writing. The story line is great, the imagery and word usage unparalled, and the rhythm flows to the end. APPLAUDS for a wonderful piece of work |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Franni, this caught me, like one of those stories you read when you loose sight of letters and are just there, in the story, watching. Very well done! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed very much. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Well written and scary for sure. One of those real life stories that keeps you spellbound. Nice work. |
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