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Franni
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0 posted 03-12-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for Franni   Email Franni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Franni

My friend Anna's daddy
Had two fingers on his left hand,
A red scar on his tawny cheek.
My father  held my hand tight
As we watched him cut firewood
With his rusty circular saw.
I never saw Anna's mom,
But that day the curtain moved
And I knew she was peeping out.
The cottage was so small.
I'm not sure Anna had a room
Of her own.

Each time the blade hit a log,
I jumped, squeezing my father's hand.
Sharp teeth in harsh vibrato
Screamed  out high notes
Then dropping a harmonic third
Releasing the wood,
Singing the same eerie theme
Over and over again;
Chips were flying.

Father looked me straight in the eye
And said, "You must never
Come here without mom or me.
This is a very dangerous place!"
I nodded.
I understood.

So Anna came down the alley
To play on my jungle gym,
To catch baby horned toads,
Then put them to bed in my dollhouse.
We would swing double
To the rhythms of distant
Whining saws.
Anna would go home
When she wanted to.

One day when I was  alone
My mom sent me to the store
One block away  for candy.
Returning home I went the long way.
I heard no sounds of saws,
Walked down the alley
Past  Anna's house,
Looking for her.

On arriving home
Mother stood
Switch in hand and
Pulling another off the elm.
The sting on my calves
Was like nothing I had
Known or felt before.
Red welts and streaks
Burned all night.  
I did not understand
Mother's desperation.
I did not know until
I was older of a danger
Beyond the saws,
Of  Anna's mom and a butcher knife,
Or about that scar
On her daddy's cheek.

Franni


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Pepper
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1 posted 03-12-2000 11:21 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

A heartwrenching story so well written ......
Exquisite piece Fran .....
Love You,
Pepper

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Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 03-12-2000 11:25 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Superb writing from a lovely poetess. I was so glad to see this talent on display.
Well done, dear friend,
Liz
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3 posted 03-12-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Franni~
This is just awesome writing.
What a wonderful Sunday morning treat.
You must come more often.
~*Marge*~


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Nan
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4 posted 03-12-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Franni

This is one of those works that defies any description short of "poignant"...

It's nice to see you post - whenever we can get you here...
Poet deVine
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5 posted 03-12-2000 05:02 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow...scary story....I like this a lot..
Denise
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6 posted 03-12-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This was a captivating read, Franni. Well done!

Denise
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7 posted 03-12-2000 06:34 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

A chilling story told very well!!
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 03-12-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Franni, The wonder of your work painted in such vivid words, took a minute out of my life I shall not forget. *L* Sy
WhtDove
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Shaking off those chills! Great to see you post! Very chilling story!
Franni
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10 posted 03-13-2000 09:39 AM       View Profile for Franni   Email Franni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Franni

Thank you everyone for the wonderful support and encouragement.  This is a great group.  The feed back and responses meant a lot.

Franni
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WOW!! Franni...this is an excellent piece of writing. The story line is great, the imagery and word usage unparalled, and the rhythm flows to the end. APPLAUDS for a wonderful piece of work  
Martie
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12 posted 03-13-2000 01:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Franni, this caught me, like one of those stories you read when you loose sight of letters and are just there, in the story, watching.  Very well done!
Mike
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Enjoyed very much.
Danny Holloway
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14 posted 03-13-2000 03:28 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Well written and scary for sure. One of those real life stories that keeps you spellbound.

Nice work.
 
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