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The Fall Of St. Michael

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Michael
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0 posted 03-12-2000 07:51 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

The Fall Of St. Michael


Torrents of rain searing the sky,
All heaven heralding the cry.
By the vista ever riven
In fall of the unforgiven!
A sword of light laid to the side
Of gleaming scales tinged with Pride.
Where in the aftermath lay he,
Demon slayer of God's decree.

Now fallen by the tempting lure
Of lust in look of eyes impure.
By wings, flailing in agony,
No more would God recognize he.
Nor angelic flight serve him,
Nor heaven grace eyes now grown dim.
No deed come ‘fore there save his cause
In falling to hell's outstretched claws.

Heretofore, forever after,
Relishes Satan in laughter.
Sender of the succubus lies
That lay lust to archangel eyes.
A moment his, ever to savor
By Michael's own sword - come the favor
Returned to God by swipe of head.
All heaven weep, St Michael's Dead.

Michael Anderson




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-12-2000).]
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1 posted 03-12-2000 08:46 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Michael, This is vastly deep, and quite frightening to say the least. I am hoping that I read this wrong the two times I read it, cause to me this one seems your at the bottom of the pit and my heart bleeds if that's the case. You never need to fall that deep with friends here all willing to catch you and bring you back. Satan can only win if you let him win, you have the power to throw him out and let God's hand guide you to freedom.
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2 posted 03-12-2000 09:12 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wow Michael..powerful piece. Very sad.  
My question is; What did you and Chris get into this weekend? lol
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3 posted 03-12-2000 09:17 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Magnificent! I hope you realize this is one of your best..wait! I say that all the time! So if this and everything else you write is your best, do you have a 'worst' or a 'so-so'? I bet you don't!  
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4 posted 03-12-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

This is truly magnificent, leaving me in total awe !
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Wow...this is very powerful Michael. Although very sad in its content, it certainly strikes a loud chord with me. Well written  
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6 posted 03-12-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Epic~quality condensed~form, Sir. Michael.   It's good writing you've shared here.
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7 posted 03-12-2000 10:42 AM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon

Demon slayer of God's Decree
Thou shalt rise from ashes Thou'll see

That which Thou think caused Thine fall
Behold, it's making Thee the strongest of all

We shall not weep, for Thou art not dead
"The Master" still counts on his 'Slayer of heads'..!

Heal well Michael..!

'Chilling' work BTW..


 "No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


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8 posted 03-12-2000 10:56 AM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

Excellent Michael. A lot of deep emotions running through this piece.
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9 posted 03-12-2000 02:50 PM       View Profile for Poeminister   Email Poeminister   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poeminister's Home Page   View IP for Poeminister

Dear Michael,

This is powerfully written.  I wish I knew the meaning of it...I always admire your poetry.  You have incredible faculty.  

Be well.

From Poeminister

 "...no single sound too rude    
Upon thy slumber shall intrude,
Our thoughts, our souls- O God above!    
In every deed shall mingle, love."
--Edgar Allan Poe (from Serenade)




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10 posted 03-12-2000 03:03 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Michael, this is truly a powerful poem. Quit obivoiusly a surge of emotions going on here and somehow you always seem to word them the such a perfect flow.

Marina
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11 posted 03-12-2000 03:08 PM       View Profile for Poeminister   Email Poeminister   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poeminister's Home Page   View IP for Poeminister

Dear micheal again,

Sorry for my confoundedness about this poem It overwhelmed me a bit...It's very deep. I couldn't ever know what compelled you to write it. It must be something very personal and disturbing to you.  All the same...I just wish you well.

From Poeminister  
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12 posted 03-12-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wonderful writing, Michael. How about a sequel .... like The Fall and Rise of St. Michael?
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13 posted 03-12-2000 04:24 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I have to agree with Balladeer on this one Michael, we do need a sequel...I'd love to see the rising!!!G* As always, this drips with emotion!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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14 posted 03-12-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well I hope it isn't as LD says Michael!
Actually buddy, Michael is the one who has Satan bound!!!!  And he's fixin to kick his butt out of Heaven!  You have power, use it!
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15 posted 03-12-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

St. Michael only stumbles he never falls  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

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I only THOUGHT i cried my last tear tonight?
What'd you have to go and do THAT for?  I am
totally aching now...
Michael
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17 posted 03-13-2000 04:54 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Uh, I realize it's a little late for a disclaimer, But I sincerely want to apologize for any concerns over my well being this poem has drawn.  I am writing an 8 mini poem Saga wherein St. Michael will ultimately fight seven demons, (deadly sins), - Wrath, Envy, Pride, Lust..etc. Chris will be applying art work as well, (He paid me to mention that!).  

Anyhow, this was just an excerpt of that come's near the end of the Whole of the poem. I happened to catch a muse early this morning while at Chris's house and ran with it. Though it is somewhat an acknowledgement of how I've handled my own inner demons in life, I didn't think it would draw such a concern and hadn't really looked back in on it till now.  Oh, and just for those of you really really need to know, yes - St. Michael will rise once more.

Thank you all for the replies.

michael

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See Michael.. they all know better than to listen to you when you bad-mouth me. EVERYONE knows you're just jealous!!!  

In all sincerity, I feel honored to have had you ask for me to accompany these pieces with my artwork. I only hope I can bring them up to par with the incredible passion and severity of your writing! I'll do my best not to let you, or your work down!

And to this... you already know I think it rocks! It's chock full of power and pain! Your usage of "common" phrasality, (is that a word???) mixed into a quite uncommon and exceptional poem leaves me breathless in awe! A masterpiece I anxiously await my friend!
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Now THIS is what I like to wake up to in the morning ...  

Poetry most rare, Mr Michael sir, but I do have one little nitpick -- as was said in a previous reply, this has all the makings of an epic poem -- and thus I must say that the way you ended it "St. Michael's Dead" is a little sudden for my taste.  Not in the flavor of an epic at all.  

Of course at this juncture you might ask: "Well then, Ms. Smarty Pants, how could I rewrite it?"    Unfortunately, my answer would have to be "Um -- I dunno."  It's kinda early right now, and I don't thik well in the morning ... but I just thought I'd point that out and see what your brain could do with it (if you even decide to heed my opinion -- LOL)

Humbly, (yeah right)

--Me


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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20 posted 03-13-2000 07:09 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Gloria,
   I am so sorry to have misled you in the posting of this.  You friendship and genuine concern for me means the world to me.  Please accept my apology.

Marilyn, Basically, anything and everything we knew could in now manner be good for us!!!

PdV, got many I wouldn't share share with my dog for fear of him howling for the remainder ofhis days...

moon moon, thank you for the little poem.  Indeed - Michael will be back... just has a struggle now and again, and doen't always handle his failures well...LOL

Marina, surge is a very accurate accessment.  Indeed, it was.

poeminister, no need to apologize for anything.  I see where this might seem very obscure in the manner posted.

Balladeer - more than a sequel, this one comes in eight parts.  This was actually the seventh here, glad you enjoyed it so much.

devina, I assure you you will see the rising soon.  

Rebecca, Michael will get to deal with satan in part eight, stay tuned, it gets better.

Isis, well, I just lost my head...LOL  I will keep that in mind from now on.  

serenity, I surely meant not to bring any tears with this one     I will make you smile for sure next time - deal?

Chris, I certainly am jealous of a few of the post you landed this morning.  you are awesome bud.  ("common" phrasality) well if that ain't a word - it certainly should be.  LOL at English Workshop Instructor asking me...

Ah, Kess, but it hasn't ended yet and indeed, the way Michael comes back shall truly be a work in itself.  Stay tuned.


Thank you all for the replies.

Michael

 
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