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CMGrimm
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

0 posted 2000-03-12 07:15 AM

Last night
I watched a teardrop
slowly trace it's way
across your lovely
cheek.
It hovered a moment
at the tip of your nose
as if to tease me
and make me feel ashamed
for hurting you so badly.
Finally it broke itself free
and came to a rest
on your soft pillow
to join countless others
of it's kind that I
never knew existed.

Christopher M. Grimm

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2000-03-12 09:15 AM

Wow Chris...revealing piece indeed and very sad.

If we could only live in a world without tears.

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-03-12 09:18 AM

Lovely, detailed work. Poignant, though not pitiful...very nice writing, Chris.

~ Claire

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-03-12 10:11 AM

WOW!!! Chris, this is excellent!! I'm not talking okay, or even good, but great. You need to get this one out to a publisher. It speaks so loud and clear. Wonderful job

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-03-12 10:28 AM

ChrisG~

This one has 'heart and soul'.
Just lovely and the thought lingers ...
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

CMGrimm
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

5 posted 2000-03-12 09:01 PM

Thank you Marilyn, Claire, Ruth and Marge....

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 2000-03-12 09:42 PM

This is great Chris! Beautifully written!

Denise

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2000-03-12 09:48 PM

The last line, so completed this very well done poem...I like the way you write!

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

8 posted 2000-03-12 10:02 PM

This shows a depth of emotion m'friend...I can feel your sensitivity with this one!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

CMGrimm
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

9 posted 2000-03-13 07:25 AM

Thanks denise, Martie and devina...for reading and enjoying.

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

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