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The Body of a Woman
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The Body of a Woman |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The body of a woman The soul of a child The heart of a human The will of something wild Alone with my thoughts my mind tends to roam to all the lessons I was taught and about a place called home I think about a time when I was small walking a think line and having no one to call There were highs and there were lows the desprate cries all of lifes blows There were cries in the night that no one heard The scars out of sight Wishing for the wings of a bird The memories haunting tearing me from within The voices taunting To release would be sin In the body of a woman all locked up tight feelings of being inhuman screaming silently in the night Butterflies don't cry Are they more blessed than I? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Piercing words from a poetic mind .... Very well presented Pepper & Liz |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
There is such feeling here.... good one. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Butterflies must cry ... for I heard and felt the tears in this. *HUGS* to the woman in the body and the soul of the child. Love to you ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I think we have all felt this way from time to time...like a child, frightened and alone. You've portrayed that feeling well with this one  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Pepper & Liz, Thank you for your kind response. Poet deVine, I struggled with the feelings in this one, thank you for reading. Marge, Ah...you are a breath of fresh air, thank you for you remarks and for the *hugs* Hoot, Coming from you it means alot to hear your praise. Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There were cries in the night that no one heard The scars out of sight Wishing for the wings of a bird The memories haunting tearing me from within The voices taunting To release would be sin In the body of a woman all locked up tight feelings of being inhuman screaming silently in the night. ------------- this touches me butterfly... so sad but emotionally perfect...its perfectly "human" to feel this way when you've been hurt... i know you find the healing i do in your writing... take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is a very creative piece, butterfly! Great job! Nathan |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M. I thought you might understand this and was hoping I would hear from you. Thank you so much for your kind words and for your input. I have found freedom in my writing that I never thought would come. Nate, Thank you |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
This is truly moving.....Saddness There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
First Knight, I appreciate you reading, thank you. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Among all else that was said, I can only say that things will get better, hang in there!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Devina, There is always rain before the rainbow...thank you for words of hope. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Butterflies, Another great pice from you. I felt your pain via your poignant and amazingly crafted words. You ay that writing helps you? Keep going because it helps alot of other people too.  I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So sad, but wonderfully well done! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mete, Thank you for reading, and yes although it would seem that reliving pain would hurt...sometimes it hurts to heal. Suthern, Thank you |
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