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Open Poetry #6

Little Droplets

hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

0 posted 2000-03-11 11:15 PM

Forming clear, little droplets,
Meandering down the glass,
The drops get larger and heavier,
Falling faster, twisting less.
Hold my hand as we watch
Heaven’s tears trickling by.
I see your reflection in the glass,
Droplets mask the tears you cry:

Clear, little droplets;
Getting larger and heavier;
Falling faster. Hold my hand.
Tears will pass.

We watch the storm together;
Feel the thunder in our hearts.
The rain pours harder, faster.
Lightening skips a startled beat.
I hold you close, look at me.
The storm will soon drift by.
I see my reflection in your eyes:
Your tears mask the tears I cry.

Clear, little droplets;
Getting larger and heavier;
Falling faster. Hold my hand.
Tears will pass.

hailfellow
"If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense."
~Nietzsche

tulip
Member

since 1999-07-04

Posts 320
unknown

1 posted 2000-03-11 11:33 PM

Hailfellow,
I loved this...nice job!

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

2 posted 2000-03-12 12:58 PM

Wonderfully written
I liked this very much.
thankx
Rich

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

3 posted 2000-03-12 01:01 AM

A very expressive piece of work, I especially enjoyed the first stanza.

~ Claire

hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

4 posted 2000-03-16 10:45 PM

Sorry that I haven't been back sooner, but thank you for all of the really nice comments. It is good to hear from fellow poets. Thanks again.

hailfellow
"If life had no sense and I had to choose nonsense, then I too should consider this the most sensible nonsense."
~Nietzsche

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

5 posted 2000-03-16 10:51 PM

Very beautiful work, with a slight tinge of sadness woven within. Exellent job!

*Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~

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