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Incomprehensible You

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 03-11-2000 10:02 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel


Incomprehensible You

Moving pictures...

plays on the
screen of my
mind

Sitting in
the back row
I watch
incomprehensible
you

Rainbow colours
locked away
stripped and
faded to
grey

Black upon white
I sit and stare
at the confused
state of
us

A silent movie
but...
actions speak
louder
than words

I hear you
My love..
loud and
clear.

Dark Angel
2000



 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-11-2000).]
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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 03-11-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DarkAngel~

This poem is stark-naked emotion.
Sensitively portrayed.
It flickers across the screen.
Wonderful job, gal.
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 03-11-2000 10:40 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent work, Angel. How different life can look when we view it as if it were on the screen.
tracie66
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3 posted 03-11-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

You have the most incredible way with words this too is fantastic.


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Girl, I think Marge said it well! You've put some raw emotions into some fantastic poetry! Hang in there! ~HUGS~
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This is one of your best, DA...wonderful poem...you have a way with free verse that I envy!  
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Great free verse here DA...love the symbolism  
Martie
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An excellent poem!
Denise
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I agree, Dark Angel. Excellent poem expressing real pain. Well done.

Denise
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DA. . . you have indeed captured the pain of life. . . sometimes, it does feel like a movie doesn't it?

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--Victor Frankl

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Actions do speak louder than words...you've captured quite an emotion with this one!!!

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