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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2000-03-11 10:02 PM



Incomprehensible You

Moving pictures...

plays on the
screen of my
mind

Sitting in
the back row
I watch
incomprehensible
you

Rainbow colours
locked away
stripped and
faded to
grey

Black upon white
I sit and stare
at the confused
state of
us

A silent movie
but...
actions speak
louder
than words

I hear you
My love..
loud and
clear.

Dark Angel
2000

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 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




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© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-03-11 10:11 PM


DarkAngel~

This poem is stark-naked emotion.
Sensitively portrayed.
It flickers across the screen.
Wonderful job, gal.
~*Marge*~


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Balladeer
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2 posted 2000-03-11 10:40 PM


Excellent work, Angel. How different life can look when we view it as if it were on the screen.
tracie66
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3 posted 2000-03-11 10:57 PM


You have the most incredible way with words this too is fantastic.


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

WhtDove
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4 posted 2000-03-11 11:14 PM


Girl, I think Marge said it well! You've put some raw emotions into some fantastic poetry! Hang in there! ~HUGS~
Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-03-12 12:07 PM


This is one of your best, DA...wonderful poem...you have a way with free verse that I envy!  
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 2000-03-12 10:15 AM


Great free verse here DA...love the symbolism  
Martie
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7 posted 2000-03-12 01:04 PM


An excellent poem!
Denise
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8 posted 2000-03-12 10:24 PM


I agree, Dark Angel. Excellent poem expressing real pain. Well done.

Denise

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9 posted 2000-03-13 12:41 PM


DA. . . you have indeed captured the pain of life. . . sometimes, it does feel like a movie doesn't it?

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devina
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10 posted 2000-03-13 01:26 AM


Actions do speak louder than words...you've captured quite an emotion with this one!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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