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Wha' Hoppen?????

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Balladeer
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0 posted 03-11-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


She thought me quite witty
And laughed at each ditty.
She knew I was not one to bore
So how did I come
To be such a bum
Just because I'm not hers any more?

Her face beamed with pride
As she walked by my side.
She loved all the clothes that I wore
So what little quirk
Has made me a jerk
Just because I'm not hers any more?

She thought me quite handsome,
A Tom Cruise and then some,
Pure joy for her eyes to explore
But now she says smugly
I'm really quite ugly
Because I'm not hers any more.

So what silly reason
Has made me displeasin'?
The thought to my mind that occurs
Is that I wasn't good
Because I was good
But because I was good - and was hers!

And, now that I'm not,
I have just gone to pot
Quite unfit to be one to adore.
Good Sir Galahad
Has really turned bad
Because I'm not hers any more.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 03-11-2000 04:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You're hers no more? Deer, not to fret
Your ante's safe I bet
The time without will shortlived be
I know this for a fact
'Twas naught for sure what you had lacked
You'll find another she
Martie
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2 posted 03-11-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I think you are witty
and really quite pretty
though we've never met
except on the net
even if you're not mine
I think you're just fine
a sweet loving man
and I am your fan
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 03-11-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
I think Nan nailed it down pretty good. Clever poem, I like.
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 03-11-2000 05:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
I find your remarks
quite, quite witty
and I also think you're pretty.
(well .. handsome)

Can't imagine what she could not see
but I am reminded ...
perhaps she is blinded  

LOL!  You crack me up, Michael.  
~*Marge*~




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5 posted 03-11-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Funny how that goes, isn't it? One day you're the king of the castle, the next a pauper.....only in someone elses eyes though! So it was never reality anyway! Excellent writing, as usual!  
Balladeer
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6 posted 03-11-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Nan....thanks for the comment. I up the ante whenever I can  

Why, thank you, dear Martie
I must be a smarty
To have one like you as a fan.
With your free verse skills
That keep giving me chills
I'll be your true internet man.  

Sy...Right you are. Nan is one of great nailers of our century. Thanks, my friend.

Marge....Anytime I can crack you up, life is worth living. (You're pretty, too   )

Denise....How right you are. That's why it's best to be confident in your own mind...and, if others agree, that's nice.  
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To leave you like this
she really must be
not only blind but
truly crazy!


Good poem sir! She's out of her mind I tell you! Mad! Two cans short of a six pack!  
tracie66
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Upon reading your poem
I gave out a groan
for the woman you spoke upon

She must be a witch
to give you the ditch
and not worthy for you to long

So bal my dear friend
say it's the end
And kiss that woman goodbye

She gave you the flick
And give's heaps of stick
You don't need to know why

LoL and a BIG HUG tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
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It's amazing how our views change on something when we no longer (for want of a better word) posess it.
Shelley
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10 posted 03-12-2000 10:43 AM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

This is great!! It reminds me of the little ditties my grandfather use to go around singing.
Balladeer
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11 posted 03-12-2000 03:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

DeVine one....hehe. yep, and two tacos short of a Mexican dinner!!!

Tracie...what a terrifice reply. I love the way your mind works. Hugs to ya  

Hoot...ain't it amazing how that works??? and it does every time, doesn't it?

Shelley...OUCH!!!! a grandfatherly ditty??? I'm mortally wounded here!!! ROFL!!!! (it's probably true). Thank you, friend!
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12 posted 03-13-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ah, sweet Balladeer
You need have no fear
You're witty and pretty - that's so!
You never were mine
But this gal still finds
You almost as delightful as Toe!
Marilyn
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Cause she did this to you,
She isn't so true,
And worthy of you she is not!

So move on my firend,
Your heart soon will mend,
And true love will find you one day.

Nice little ditty my friend. Too many truths lie in these words.  
Corinne
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14 posted 03-13-2000 10:22 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Yes, silly, it's BECAUSE your not hers anymore!

Sounds like she still loves you, and there's a thin line between looooveee and hate, yes a thin line between love and hate.

Corinne
Shelley
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15 posted 03-13-2000 02:36 PM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

I didn't mean to offend you Sir!!!!
It was meant as a compliment. His wit in rhyme was quite extraordinary and always seem to make you smile!!!

So....smile!!!!
 
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