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Wha' Hoppen?????
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Wha' Hoppen????? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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She thought me quite witty And laughed at each ditty. She knew I was not one to bore So how did I come To be such a bum Just because I'm not hers any more? Her face beamed with pride As she walked by my side. She loved all the clothes that I wore So what little quirk Has made me a jerk Just because I'm not hers any more? She thought me quite handsome, A Tom Cruise and then some, Pure joy for her eyes to explore But now she says smugly I'm really quite ugly Because I'm not hers any more. So what silly reason Has made me displeasin'? The thought to my mind that occurs Is that I wasn't good Because I was good But because I was good - and was hers! And, now that I'm not, I have just gone to pot Quite unfit to be one to adore. Good Sir Galahad Has really turned bad Because I'm not hers any more. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're hers no more? Deer, not to fret Your ante's safe I bet The time without will shortlived be I know this for a fact 'Twas naught for sure what you had lacked You'll find another she |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I think you are witty and really quite pretty though we've never met except on the net even if you're not mine I think you're just fine a sweet loving man and I am your fan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I think Nan nailed it down pretty good. Clever poem, I like. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ I find your remarks quite, quite witty and I also think you're pretty. (well .. handsome) Can't imagine what she could not see but I am reminded ... perhaps she is blinded  LOL! You crack me up, Michael.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Funny how that goes, isn't it? One day you're the king of the castle, the next a pauper.....only in someone elses eyes though! So it was never reality anyway! Excellent writing, as usual! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nan....thanks for the comment. I up the ante whenever I can  Why, thank you, dear Martie I must be a smarty To have one like you as a fan. With your free verse skills That keep giving me chills I'll be your true internet man.  Sy...Right you are. Nan is one of great nailers of our century. Thanks, my friend. Marge....Anytime I can crack you up, life is worth living. (You're pretty, too )Denise....How right you are. That's why it's best to be confident in your own mind...and, if others agree, that's nice. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
To leave you like this she really must be not only blind but truly crazy! Good poem sir! She's out of her mind I tell you! Mad! Two cans short of a six pack! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Upon reading your poem I gave out a groan for the woman you spoke upon She must be a witch to give you the ditch and not worthy for you to long So bal my dear friend say it's the end And kiss that woman goodbye She gave you the flick And give's heaps of stick You don't need to know why LoL and a BIG HUG tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
It's amazing how our views change on something when we no longer (for want of a better word) posess it. |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
This is great!! It reminds me of the little ditties my grandfather use to go around singing. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
DeVine one....hehe. yep, and two tacos short of a Mexican dinner!!! Tracie...what a terrifice reply. I love the way your mind works. Hugs to ya Hoot...ain't it amazing how that works??? and it does every time, doesn't it? Shelley...OUCH!!!! a grandfatherly ditty??? I'm mortally wounded here!!! ROFL!!!! (it's probably true). Thank you, friend! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ah, sweet Balladeer You need have no fear You're witty and pretty - that's so! You never were mine But this gal still finds You almost as delightful as Toe! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Cause she did this to you, She isn't so true, And worthy of you she is not! So move on my firend, Your heart soon will mend, And true love will find you one day. Nice little ditty my friend. Too many truths lie in these words. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Yes, silly, it's BECAUSE your not hers anymore! Sounds like she still loves you, and there's a thin line between looooveee and hate, yes a thin line between love and hate. Corinne |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
I didn't mean to offend you Sir!!!! It was meant as a compliment. His wit in rhyme was quite extraordinary and always seem to make you smile!!! So....smile!!!! |
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