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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-03-11 09:54 AM


The Gloom Of The Day

The gloom of the day is festering my mood
I feel I'm starting to become sadly unglued,
a roaring thunder becoming clearly evident
I hide slyly knowing I need to stay prudent.

I feel I'm starting to become sadly unglued
normally I myself can act relatively shrewd,
the weather effects my interior mannerism
throwing off my usual outward mechanism.

A roaring thunder becoming clearly evident
leaving me shattered in fear of the moment
I retreat to the couch hiding under cushions
as I feel the thunderous deep repercussions.

I hide slyly knowing I need to stay prudent
for I excelled at being a straight A student,
yet as my inner persistent feelings interlude
the gloom of the day is festering my mood.



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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-03-11 12:36 PM


Girl, you'd better brighten up !
I need for you to smile.  
Too much gloom
and too much doom
will get you after while.

Throw it in a corner
and gladly walk away ...
practice a great big smile  
then you've surely earned your 'A'.
Love you ... ~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-03-11 01:39 PM


Now this is one of the best 'form' poems I've read! Usually I don't like them but you've done a great job with this one.. I'll send you some sunshine, ok?
Lost Dreamer
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3 posted 2000-03-11 02:49 PM


The Gloom is gone my smile replaces
in clear skies the suns smile traces.
My mood returns to peaceful realms
now Mr. Warm Sunshine overwhelms.

In clear skies the suns smile traces
bringing smiles to once gloomy faces,
mine included is much more brighter
as the sun makes everything lighter.

My mood returns to peaceful realms
as I happily admire two flowering elms.
I smile to you and thank you kindly
you all are so very nice and friendly.

Now Mr. Warm Sunshine overwhelms
all natural beauty within glowing realms
I invite all to share in delightful graces
the gloom is gone my smile replaces.

I Thank You very much, I am having fun playing with this form right now.

Martie
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4 posted 2000-03-11 03:59 PM


The weather always affects my mood too--I enjoyed both your poems, and I'm glad you are feeling more sunny.
Denise
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5 posted 2000-03-11 05:15 PM


Isn't it funny how the weather can affect us like that? I'm glad you are smiling again! Great poems, Gloria!

Denise

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6 posted 2000-03-11 08:12 PM


LostDreamer~

Gosh ! Now I can breath easy
Your persona light n' breezy
All decked out in full array
another full of sunshine day

It is nice to see your smile
grinning back,  just a while
Glad to see you can have fun
verses giving forms free run

~*Marge*~


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