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CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

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USA

0 posted 2000-03-11 07:12 AM

I closed my eyes
last night
and saw you,
the way you were.
Waving at me
from the end of the walk
one hand resting gently
on the post
that holds up the gate.
I could hear the sounds
of the gate swinging softly shut
and your footsteps
falling on the hard concrete
as you walked
away.

Christopher M. Grimm

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 2000-03-11 09:13 AM

Chris...another fine poem you've written here

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

2 posted 2000-03-11 05:36 PM

Thanks Ruth.

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2000-03-11 07:33 PM

ChrisG~
So nostalgic is the picture of this moment.
Beautifully done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-03-11 08:01 PM

I could picture it in my mind from your words! This is great, Chris!

Denise

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

5 posted 2000-03-12 07:12 AM

Thanks Marge and Denise...your kind comments are always appretiated.

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2000-03-12 09:20 AM

Oh such sad dreams you have Chris.

I hope this comes from poetic lience and not from your life. Well written my friend.

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

7 posted 2000-03-12 09:39 AM

Beautiful, the motivation of this piece leaves so much for the reader's imagination, yet the degree of detail you've written into it sustains, actually becomes, the poem. Again, wonderful work, Chris.

~ Claire

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

8 posted 2000-03-12 09:05 PM

Thank you Marilyn and Claire...and no..this isn't from life's experience that I speak from here...or is it? I guess at one point or another we have all let someone walk away...

Anyway...thanks for the kind responses.

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2000-03-12 09:45 PM

This poem is so complete in portraying the feeling of loss...excellent!!

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

10 posted 2000-03-12 10:03 PM

You've drawn the picture quite well!!! This was yet another to be remembered!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

11 posted 2000-03-12 10:07 PM

Sometimes the simplest of actions can be the most poignant and leave the strongest memories. Very well written

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

12 posted 2000-03-13 07:23 AM

Thanks Martie, Devina, and Balladeer...your comments and reactions are always appreciated.

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

infinat3 sadn3ss
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 85
somerset england

13 posted 2000-03-13 03:37 PM

short but oh so sweet.reminiscant and vaugely innocent . arent dreams beautiful?.

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