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Michael
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0 posted 03-11-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

WINDOW "PAINS"

I stand at the window pane.
It's so cold out here it burns.
It just keeps pouring rain,
I know I'm running out of turns.

The tears, they flow as rivers
From eyes welled within disgrace.
Time never breaking the slivers
Of ice set meek upon my face.

But, God, to look upon her sorrow,
I just want to scream desperately...
"I'm here!, I'm here!" but then I know
Where she is - she can't hear me.

I have no way of reaching her,
All hope dripping away, alas...
She looks at me but then never
Can quite see me through this glass.

And I cry out to the heavens,
Cause it's killing me inside.
But the tears never serve to cleanse,
With this invisible divide.

Answer coming, a shameless tatter
Of a love I just can't hide.
A pane between that just won't shatter,
Leaving us both on the outside.

Michael Anderson




 For all behind was dark and drear,
And all before was night and fear.
How many hours of night or day
In those suspended pangs I lay,
I could not tell; I scarcely knew
If this were human breath I drew.

Lord Byron






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Michael
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1 posted 03-11-2000 01:25 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Just Thought I'd throw one at you all before I left.
I will see you all again on Monday.   Have a wonderful weekend, everyone.  I know I will.

Michael
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2 posted 03-11-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow! Those last two lines are killers! Loved this one....

Hope you have a great weekend take notes as I'm sure there will be lots of things going on....I've called the California National Organization of Women..told them to hide the single women as you and Chris will be on the loose!!!!
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-11-2000 01:57 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The tears, they flow as rivers
From eyes welled within disgrace.
Time never breaking the slivers
Of ice set meek upon the face.

But, God, to look upon her sorrow,
I just want to scream desperately...
"I'm here!, I'm here!" but then I know
Where she is - she can't hear me.
--------------
And I cry out to the heavens,
Cause it's killing me inside.
But the tears never serve to cleanse,
With this invisible divide.

Answer coming, a shameless tatter
Of a love I just can't hide.
A pane between that just won't shatter,
Leaving us both on the outside.
-------------
do you have a magic poetry invention...some mystical machine that creates amazing poems hour upon hour??? "me thinks" yes...
you should get a patent for it...
call it M's heart...(smile)
another painfully gorgeous poem.
take care, jm
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4 posted 03-11-2000 09:28 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderful poem Michael...well done  
Denise
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5 posted 03-11-2000 08:40 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, Michael!

Denise
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6 posted 03-12-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Michael, I believe you have inspired me...

Dying

This morning, the air is chilly
and I'm barefoot in the grass
as he sits wondering at the window
staring soulfully through the glass

at my hardened stillness
to see if he can understand
what he gets for his love
what he holds within his hand

Does he see I'm dying
does he realize that I'm weak
no dew on blades this morning
as no words I have to speak

I'm fond of sitting, picking
each blade and slicing it in half
he sits warm where I used to be
pondering how to make me laugh

The roses long wilted still remain
in a vase on the kitchen table
he doesn't see it's me
instead he creates a fable

where the being of me lives
and loves beyond the death
but sifting through the blades of grass
I search my final breath

he's foolish behind the pane
it's memory on which he's relying
fingers falling, he never turns away
but he doesn't see me dying.



 ~shadows dance by the light within~

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7 posted 03-13-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I thought this one was great and didn't see why it was all da way at de end ....I'm gonna put it through again. Michael: nice format, rhyme scheme, and concept...I admire those who can do that.
Michael
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8 posted 03-13-2000 05:21 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

pdV, Had a wonderful weekend, thank you.  Although I think Chris is developing an inferiority complex of sorts.  He really really wished he could be me...I just can't figure that guy out...LOL

Janet Marie, yeah, I got a machine and the sole patent on it as well.  It's called acute chronic depression coupled with diabetes and an ever abusive, traumatic childhood forcing societal discomfort upon  inner portions of the brain resulting in chemical imbalance that land me precisely on a fine fine line that lies just between creative genious and utter insanity!  I'm selling it though, any offers?

passing shadows, you read into this so well.  And your poetic responce was so beautiful as well.  I'm glad I could inspire such a poem out of you.  Quite a compliment in itself.  Thank you.


Thank you all for the kind replies.


Michael


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9 posted 03-14-2000 08:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Funny, but i believe that you have several
fans in the forum who have felt this same
sentiment for you...and yes, me included.
Love IS all around and it's Incredible Michael...
LittleBoyLost
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10 posted 03-14-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for LittleBoyLost   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LittleBoyLost

Very touching, Michael.  I liked what you did with "panes" and "pains".  But like your other one this could be a lot better if you worked on the meter and didn't force the rhymes.  This was still very touching.
Mistikman
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11 posted 03-14-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Good poem Michael   I seem to have that too!! No... Wait.... Im missing the diabetes, no wonder my stuff comes out so crappy compared to you! I knew there has to be some reason!  
Rose Red
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12 posted 03-14-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for Rose Red   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rose Red

Michael love, I have glass cutters if you need them. *sigh* you are still my favourite poet of all time.
Rose


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13 posted 03-14-2000 11:17 PM       View Profile for jbowie   Email jbowie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbowie

Your ability to turn these amazing poems out must be driven by something beyond mortal ken. I am impressed to say the least at how you can understand relationships so well and be able to write out why and what they mean to you. I know that reply is not the most astute but I just Wrelly likd Wht you rote
 
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