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Still In Love With You
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Still In Love With You |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Still In Love With You I woke up this morning Forced my eyes to meet the dawn Dreams of you still lingering, I guess my heart's not moving on. So I, Stumbled through what was a home Made myself a bite to eat. It's been, Many days that you've been gone And my life's been incomplete. And I, Spend my days a-wonderin' why I'm still in love with you Each night as I lay down to cry I'm still in love, Still in love, With you. As I, Drove in our old pickup truck, To face this day alone, I passed that place I lost my luck; Oh I wish that I'd have known. That there'd, Come a day I'd have to face The pain of losing you. I'd end up stuck in second place, And have to start anew. I should have changed a million things I should have held you close. I should have shown the love I have, When you needed it the most. ‘Cause I, Spend my days a-wonderin' why I'm still in love with you Wish I could go back in time, ‘Cause I'm still in love, Oh I'm still In love, With you. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Now just as a disclaimer: This is not about anything current, this isn't about anyone else. The inspiration for this came from a conversation with a close friend last night, so here it is. If it sounds like a bad country song, that's because that's what it is. I have the tune still stuck in my head, so give me a break! LOL! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
ROFLMAO......Oh Geesh, I'm gonna wet my pants! So funny, cause as I was reading this, that's exactly what I was hearing! YOU - singing this with a country 'twang in your voice...and gads - was it painful! hehehe You know, me being a hillbilly and all, it came real easy to me! Whew...I gotta pee, so if you'll excuse me Garth...er...Chris! Psssttt...I'm gonna hunt you and Michael down this weekend! EEeeekkkk! (Packing my heavy-duty duct tape, and wire!)  Coming right through your neck of the woods! hehe Scarey thought, 'eh? Hope you lose some sleep over it too!!  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I was thinkin you might have really fallen in love there Chris...not that she's not out there...but this was serious country m'friend!! I do believe I was singing along!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You're beating yourself up with "should'ves, would'ves and could'ves, Bud - That ain't no way to go... You best be smiling when I get there tomorrow - I'd hate to have to beat one out of you!!! Hang in there man, I am there any way I can be for ya....you know that. Michael |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
ARGH!!!!!!! *Mistikman goes running to the hills from the Country music* But seriously, great poem/song  I grew up with songs like this, and have been forever warped because of it. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Dang you - leave it to me to reply before I catch the disclaimer...LOL Now I'm really gonna smack you - ya HICK!!! michael |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok....now that I've stopped laughing.... this probably would be a hit in the C&W market! Full of guilt and pickup trucks... A little different than what we've come to expect from you...I love it!!! Stretch those artistic muscles!  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Betsy, tell me it ain't so! Michael's coming to YOUR house? I got it now...I'm gonna be closer to you two 'coons than I thought! Bakersfield was a safe distance, but now I think I better cancel my trip! hehehe I'll be sure and stir up lots of dust as I pass through Modesto, ok? BTW, I'm dropping devina off, per her request! LOL (She's bored!) |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
and the plot thickens...... Yikes Michael |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LOL Chris! I thought it sounded like a song. You know what they say about playing country music backwards don't ya? You get your house back and your car, job, wife...hehehe Good job Chris! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Um -- never mind, what I said before was rude ... sorry --Me< !signature--> Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 03-11-2000).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Why's my name pop up amist all the action??? HMMM...I do believe I'll sit this one out... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
I'm so thrilled with the email you sent me, I can hardly stand it. You are so kind to thank me privately. I love this poem and can only imagine that your voice would lend itself to the singing of it most magnificently. Thank you. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Loved your poem Christopher, I hope you and Michael enjoy your weekend hanging out ... mmm Australia seems oh so far away down under sometimes - would be nice to join in all the fun and laughter with you guys! Enjoy!  Roniece |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ Enjoyed this piece. Actually, it's got promise with a country tune flair. You and Michael have a nice weekend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Christopher...what an excellent poem. It would make a great country song and I can picture Clay Walker singing it Well done |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Uh huh... I see how it works... Last weekend there was a PIP party in Florida - this weekend there's one in California... Well, I've got one brewing here in a couple of weeks myself... See if I care that none of you invited me... Nope - I'm not mad... Not even a little...  BTW - Neato poem...  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-11-2000).] |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Wonderful song/poem, my friend. As I was reading it, I couldn't help but those past loves that have shredded all I had to offer them. Thanks for the mammo..um..memories. Alicat the Persnikitty *hey...who the hell put this tear in ma beer, and where's a banjo pickin coon dog when ya need one?* |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ok, I can see my attempt at humor has met with mixed reactions! Christopher - Thank you for clearing that up for everyone! Gen - Go change your diaper! And I didn't know you were going to be in the area! If I would have, I'd have rented out the nearest bomb-shelter! LOL Devina - Thanky-you berry much! Why I do believe you'se jumped right into the spirit of it! Michael - Yeah, but I forgot the part about my mom getting out of jail, only to get run over by a train! Mistikman - You can come hide in the bomb shelter with me and Mike... I promise, nothing but good ol' rock n' roll! Michael - Hehehehe! -or- Haw-haw-haw! Sharon - I like trying different things... keeps me (and everyone else) on their toes! Gen - Devina's coming too? Geesh, sounds like Mike and I are in for a rough time of it! LOL Michael - Tell me it aint so!!! Becca - EXACTLY! LOL, but I also heard you go to hell for playing music backwards...LOL Kess - I read what you wrote before, ahem. S'ok, we'll chat about it later... Devina - COWARD!!! Oscar - Thank you for another kind reply. Roniece - Thank you!!! There are advantages to being far away... For example, you don't have to hide in the bomb shelter with me Mike and Mistikman. Marge - Will do! And thank you, though I think I'd die laughing if this ever actually became a song!!! Ruth - LOL, Actually, he's one of the few country singers I like, so we won't ruin is career with this! LOL, Thank you!!! Nan - I SWEAR that I only knew of Mike coming down. Gen and Devina are news to me! If I'd have known it was going to turn into a party, I'd have invited everyone! Ali - ROFL! I hear you! And someone put a tear in my beer too! LOL |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...definately an Alan Jackson song. James |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great Chris! I enjoyed this very much! Denise |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
Still, in love with your work. Your biggest fan, O. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Country song or not..I liked it..some very pretty versus...you ought to send it in...I bet it would get recorded. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
One of my favorites of yours. Nice to read it again. |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wow, very emotional even though you were being funny! How do you DO that? *mouth hanging open in awe* hehe Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
So thats how you write country poetry. I was thinking as I was reading this.... why does this poem sound like a country song..... good one. Parker |
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