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Twelve Bells

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Mike
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0 posted 03-10-2000 03:28 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike


Came out the north, in black of night,
As venomous as serpents bite,
Laying waste to peaceful village,
Devastation, rape and pillage.

Heading south, conflagration,
In creature's wake, annihilation,
As hounds of hell on horseback rode,
The wrath of Khan, on land bestowed.

Up ahead, does next prey loom,
Word had spread, impending doom,
People in their huts aquiver,
To gods their plea, from hell deliver.

Small village lay on mountain's side,
No where to run, no where to hide,
Down below, ran river deep,
While up above, rock ledges steep.

On the wind, came people's cries,
For Huns lay wait, until sun's rise,
Then with the dawn, deep river ford,
Up mountain's side, to redden sword.

In single file, up narrow path,
Soon would feel, of Vandal's wrath,
Then from the crags, came meager band,
Not with swords, but rocks in hand.

A hoarde of locusts, on horse's back,
Were met by twelve, on foot attack,
For short instant, death's tide was stemmed,
Below rock's ledge, attackers hemmed.

Up above, a boulder pried,
Avalanche, no where to hide,
Beneath the rocks, black scourge was buried,
As were the twelve, with rocks they carried.

On mountain's side, small village lay,
Where townsfolk toil, and children play,
Where it is said, each day at dawn,
Twelve bells are rung, for twelve men gone.


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angel girl
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1 posted 03-10-2000 03:52 PM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

Wow, I feel honored to be the first one to respond to this. I really like it. Good job and keep it up.

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Michael
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2 posted 03-10-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Vivid and bone chilling imagery Mike.  A very well done poem.  I hear the bells...


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3 posted 03-10-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh Mike, you are amazing! You have so much  vision and such great language ability.  Bravo!  
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4 posted 03-10-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, Bravo, Mike! This is excellent!  

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5 posted 03-11-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Angel Girl- thank you for the comment and I will attempt to keep it up.
Micheal- appreciate the comment.  as long as they aren't tolling for me.
Martie and Denise- thank you both for the gracious comments, they are appreciated.
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6 posted 03-11-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow! (I think I said that word about your last poem!) This is incredible writing. I could feel the fear, hear the bells. Thank you for this!
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7 posted 03-11-2000 12:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
Brilliantly portrayed.
Inspirational as well.

I heard the rumble of the stone
cascading down the hill
I feared the loss of mighty warriors
hemmed against their will.

I hear the tolling of the bells,
the cries of sympathy.
Thankful the cacaphony of the bells
does not ring for me.
~*Marge*~


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8 posted 03-12-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Well constructed, Mike. This piece maintains an anticipatory aire throughout. I enjoyed it!

~ Claire
 
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