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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-10-2000 11:06 AM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

All that I have has been offered to you
My body lifted up, presented to you
Sacrifices, none too great to perform
My offerings, in this way, will not harm
Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering
Underneath star filled sky glimmering
Wreaths of holly planted upon my head
To remain after robes of white I shed
Bleeding sweat for every drop that I bled
And standing grey as stone with arms outspread

Encircled before flames consume me whole
Transfixed, sacrificed to a higher goal
I come and lay my body down by you
For salvation, nothing I would not do

© Copyright 2000 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
mystery
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1 posted 03-10-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for mystery   Email mystery   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mystery

Beautiful!, I would love for a man to want to sacrifice anything for me, it makes a person feel special to know that someone cares that much. I really enjoyed reading this.
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 03-10-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Geesh Louise!  Talk about being dedicated to a relationship!  You are!     I love this whole setting you used here...encircled by flames, the offering, and all....very enchanting - and dark.  Shall I say, *manly*.... LOL  
Diana B
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3 posted 03-10-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for Diana B   Email Diana B   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Diana B

i love the voice of this haunting  so  lovely
PoeticKnight
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4 posted 03-10-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Mystery - Thanks. But of course such a man (or woman) doesnt exist. Or do they...?

Femme - Yes, you can say 'manly'.

Diana B. - Thank you.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 03-10-2000 05:30 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

All that I have has been offered to you
My body lifted up, presented to you
Sacrifices, none too great to perform
My offerings, in this way, will not harm
----------
"I come and lay my body down by you
For salvation, nothing I would not do"
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**SIGH**  (catches her breath)

well,...  a girl cant ask for anything more than comsuming sacrifice and salvation... at least not this "brown eyed girl"...(smile)
this poem literally takes my breath away...
thank you...(smile)
I remain...intrigued...
stalking you always...your jm
PoeticKnight
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6 posted 03-10-2000 05:32 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thank you, let me help you breathe again....*S*
Janet Marie
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7 posted 03-11-2000 04:35 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

*SIGH*
nope...still not breathing...may need m2m resuscitation (hehe)
its even better at this hour...(smile)
stalking you intensly...
your jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


Janet Marie
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8 posted 03-12-2000 05:58 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

*sigh*...again...(smile)

just needed a little afternoon delight...
and now ... oxygen...*sigh*
stalking you always, jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne


Janet Marie
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9 posted 11-08-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

just adding some old favorite archived poems to my private library file...a new feature on the site.
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