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bboog
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0 posted 2000-03-09 03:02 PM


Jing-jing! Brrrinnng!
The shiny bell on his handle bars
Warned everyone to move away.
Look out world, I am coming.
That is what he seemed to say.

Sweatshirt zipped up to his neck.
Pedals churning, little shoes
Puffy cheeks and bright-eyed grin
That's the way I remember him.

Then we both moved away
And yesterday I saw his face.
Now grown up he graced the front page
of the local edition evening news.

Boy 19 Involved in Hit and Run.
Ryan Palmer fled the scene
He wrapped his car around a tree
His passenger died instantly
Seventeen empty beer bottles
found in the back seat.

Jing-jing-brrrrinnng!


© Copyright 2000 Robert Boog - All Rights Reserved
mete out
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1 posted 2000-03-09 03:28 PM


***bboog,
Phew...a very strong piece...it made me think, that's for sure...growing up can cause alot of heartache at times...in a way it is good that you are honourin his memory with this piece...
Well done.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Martie
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2 posted 2000-03-09 07:11 PM


I wonder if destiny had already placed him when he first had that tricycle?...so sad.  Well done poem.
jbouder
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3 posted 2000-03-09 10:24 PM


bboog:

We scare you off so soon?   This was well done and truly sad.  Strong work here.

Jim

bboog
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4 posted 2000-03-10 01:41 AM


To Jim, Martee & Mete Out: thank you for reading and commenting. I wrote this piece to indicate that driving while intoxicated is a selfish thing. It can hurt wives, children, family and friends of other people. I posted it in an open forum hoping that more people might benefit from reading the message. (You hurt others by drinking and driving- not only yourself- so don't be selfish and think only of yourself.)
I guess I'll jump off my soapbox now.
bboog

Severn
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5 posted 2000-03-10 06:50 AM


A sad reality...

strong piece...don't you just want to cry it to the world and change it?



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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

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6 posted 2000-03-10 07:26 AM


BB~

If you drink don't drive.
If you drive don't drink.
Just about covers it,
don't you think?

Poignant piece.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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bboog
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7 posted 2000-03-10 07:36 PM


To Marge & Severn: thank you for reading it! and as Marge writes: (sound of cutting and pasting)
If you drink don't drive.
If you drive don't drink.
Just about covers it,
don't you think?

best regards,
bboog

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