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A Kosovan Tale

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pmc
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0 posted 03-09-2000 10:30 AM       View Profile for pmc   Email pmc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pmc


A Kosovan Tale.


He stood beside his Father
as we burst into his home.
He had his chance to run,
but he wouldn't go alone.

He stood beside his Father
though we beat him with a gun,
He tried his best to fight.
I couldn't make him run.

He stood beside his Father
as we pushed him to the wall
His legs gave way beneath him
and yet he didn't fall.

He stood beside his Father
when he knew they were to die.
Tears were in his eyes
and still he didn't cry.

He stood beside his Father
in the house where he was born.
He died beside his father.
We buried them at dawn.


Patrick McFadden
21 June 1999

© Copyright 2000 Patrick McFadden - All Rights Reserved
Ted Reynolds
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1 posted 03-09-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

This poem has the impact of a bullet in my chest.  I think I will be weeping for a while.
RSEvans
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2 posted 03-09-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

ouch!  This strikes close to the bone.  Such a simple poem, but what an impact!  Kudos to you poet for stirring that within us.
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3 posted 03-09-2000 01:01 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Magnificent tale. Welcome to the family! I love this poem because I can feel it! Please check your email!  
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PMC~
Stirring.

Welcome to Passion's.
~*Marge*~


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This is a very interesting and a well written poem.  Could you please tell me a little bit more of the background behind this poem.  My son was stationed in Albania for a period of time during this conflict which is actually still in progress so I followed the events with interest.   James
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6 posted 03-09-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Welcome Pat! It is nice to have you here, and what a post for your first one!

Elizabeth

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7 posted 03-09-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wow!  This hurt my heart.
pmc
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8 posted 03-10-2000 09:14 AM       View Profile for pmc   Email pmc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pmc

Thank you all for your comments.

To answer jmlee.
I wrote the poem after listening to a TV report in which a Kosovan mother explained how she and her other children were allowed to escape but that her eldest son who was twelve had refused to come and had remained with his father.
She was looking for their bodies.

pmc
sonjes
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9 posted 03-11-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

Oh my, disturbing, sensational, sad, respectful post, pmc.
Welcome to Passions.

  Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma
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Welcome to Passions pmc...wonderfully emotional post.  Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Chris

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11 posted 03-11-2000 01:42 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

This is very powerful pmc. Might I make a suggstion though? on the very last line, instead of

We buried them at dawn.
how about
We buried them next morn.

That keeps almost the exact same message, and rhymes much better with born. Just a suggestion, in no way do you have to take it.
Again, Excellent poem.
INclan
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12 posted 03-11-2000 02:29 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Welcome to Passions.  A very moving poem...I liked the way you bring out the best and worst of humanity all in the same piece.

WEll Done,

Inclan
Diana B
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powerful writing...haunting message...good work
JamesMichael
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14 posted 03-11-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Patrick this is an excellent format and very touching...thanks for the explanation...I'm going to e-mail a copy of this to my son in Germany.    James

[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 03-11-2000).]
 
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