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A Certain Perfect Disarray

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 03-09-2000 03:04 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Apple-mint sprigs, tiny leaves
unfold to sun in ancient prayer--
    (supplication...)
Ever strives to meet perfection...
    (daily dedication...)

Lemon tree in bloom this year.
     How perfectly ironic.
Blossoms fall--lemon drops--
     Heady scent--seductive tonic--
a certain perfect disarray...
think i'll let it stay that way...
(Some things should be
     just what they are.)

Broad-leaf fern, pine-apple sage,
rose-in-bud, "Society's Page,"
(she used to be all the rage.)
spears of iris by the pond
and just the slightest curve of palm
behind the waterfall--
White ginger standing tall...
    and pots of basil
    hunger for planting
bringing out an ache in me--
ever wistful--ever wanting--
    a shovel full of upturned earth
    droplets of rain, quenching thirst.
"Gentle hands are needed here,"
said the breeze into my ear.

"Ssshh..."  It whispered me aware.
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Michael
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1 posted 03-09-2000 08:12 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oooh, what a mystifying poem...lovely ending.

All this talk of pineapple and such made me hungry though - guess I oughta go eat some breakfast, huh?

Grreat poem!

Michael
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2 posted 03-09-2000 10:30 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

"It whispered me aware".....beautiful darling!  I really like your style of writing!  Very refreshing!  I too, am hungry now, and am wanting to go outside and garden for some reason!  ROFL      
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3 posted 03-09-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

What beautiful imagery! Incredible.
Meadowmuse
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Your writing here unveils the ready newness of spring's giftings...wonderful poem!

~ Claire
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5 posted 03-09-2000 03:37 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I think I'll go to the garden too--what a lovely look through your eyes.  Enjoyed the view!
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6 posted 03-10-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Oooh!  Made Michael say "oooh!"  Incredible...  a smiling serenity hugs herself...

pFF- how well you seem to understand me!
     thank you!

Poet deVine-- always an honor--

Thanks to you also, the lovely Claire...

Martie, you are welcome in my garden anytime.

Thanks all...
Severn
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7 posted 03-10-2000 04:55 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Serenity - this is just excellent...it is so tight (my word for a poem that flows like water), well done, well done!

Lemon tree in bloom this year.
     How perfectly ironic.
Blossoms fall--lemon drops--
     Heady scent--seductive tonic--
a certain perfect disarray...

love it!





 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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This is so beautiful, Serenity! Very well done!  

Denise
serenity blaze
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9 posted 03-10-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Severn- thank you so much for adding to my
        already abundant joy with your reply.

Denise- I owe you such a debt of gratitude--
        your support gave me the confidence
        to keep posting  (I know it sounds
        ludicrous, but i am actually quite
        shy...)

Thanks again to all, this one was a joy to
share...Now GO PLANT SOMETHING! ( but let's
keep an eye on Marge and Seymour...)
Christopher
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10 posted 03-10-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Not too shy to post this greatly odiferous poem! Well done serenity, me likes berry much!
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Serenity, I liked this work, but kept wondering to myself what season it was. It seemed kind of summery with lemon blossoms dropping and their "heady scent" yet it seemed to also hint of spring with the "spears of iris" by the pond. Forgive me for being thick, but could you clarify this for me? oh, and i still liked it  
best regards,
bboog
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12 posted 03-10-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Christopher, me berry happy to hear from you!
             Thanks...

bb----I live in New Orleans, sub-tropics here, we do not actually have winter, we have a series of "cool fronts".  So yes, not
only is it possible, it is happening, and to
my joy, right in front me very eyes.  (Note
I've said nothing about my heat-loving Hibiscus, daisies, and all-time favorite, my
beloved zinnias...)
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13 posted 03-10-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The poem is exquisitely refreshing in it's style. What an excellent manner of construction and combination of imagery. I love it
 
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