navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » ~The Pain Of The Past~
Open Poetry #6
Post A Reply Post New Topic ~The Pain Of The Past~ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554


0 posted 2000-03-08 09:49 PM


~The Pain Of The Past~

Voices that return in echo's ... from the distant past,
Old wounds that wont heal, pain that lingers and lasts.

Whispers turn to whines, crying in the night,
Reasons are lost to the questions with no answers in sight.

The loss almost overtakes and breaks my will,
No release from these moments, time seems to stand still.

Childhood memories return, old ghosts calling my name,
The demons are now older, but the pain is still the same.

Returning for the answers-needing the reasons of why,
Remembering the promises broken, lost to living this lie.

From the shadows of this pain, I intend to be free,
Reclaiming my trust and faith...all the things you took from me.

Janet Marie


repost from Dark Passions
(my home away from home) (smile)


 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Witch's Brat
Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 100

1 posted 2000-03-08 10:02 PM


I know how it is, Janet, to have the memories just come back like that...

 I am a disturbed person, and I write about disturbed people. ~Tennessee Williams

SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
2 posted 2000-03-08 10:03 PM


Janet~ your poetry moves me...here and in the Dark.....Excellent job! -SEA
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-03-08 10:45 PM


Excellent writing. History has a way of shaping us into what we are. We can never lose the gentle side and the hope of brighter days.  
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
4 posted 2000-03-09 12:16 PM


Beautiful job  

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~

Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
5 posted 2000-03-09 01:30 AM


Hi Janet,

I love the last two lines, and it looks like you have gained some wisdom and strength through your pain.

Thankyou for the wonderful poem,

Cerenity

tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
6 posted 2000-03-09 02:47 AM


I'll show you the light
I'll show you the way

my hearts warmth is here to stay

I'll show you the light
burning as bright as the sun

And a heart so tender rolled into one

LoL janet marie
A beautiful poem



 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
7 posted 2000-03-09 08:08 AM


This poem speaks volumes to me, Janet.  Every stanz is an image of my own past.  Can feel the pain... but I offer a smile anyway.  


michael

PoeticKnight
Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
8 posted 2000-03-09 08:25 AM


Good working of the couplets. You can count me as a fan. I like these lines,

The loss almost overtakes and breaks my will,
No release from these moments, time seems to stand still

JML

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » ~The Pain Of The Past~

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary