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Disolving Into The Core

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Moonshine
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Alone in the darkness
of her garden she wilts,
Her once vibrant light
shines no more,
The sweet colours of her petals
bleed slowly from her,
The last shimmer of life
dully ebbs to the cold floor,
And with wounds left unhealed
by the breadth of endless time,
Her frail, broken body
finally crumbles beneath her,
Falling rapidly through
the abyss of slow beating pain,
To the rotting undergrowth
where strong roots of hope once were,
And like a loving mother calling
her sweet child to come home,
The dank, wet earth wraps itself
around her dying soul,
She takes comfort in the cold
and dark of nothingness,
Where nothing and noone
exist anymore.


[This message has been edited by Moonshine (edited 03-08-2000).]
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1 posted 03-08-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Wow Moonshine! Pretty powerful work you have here--sometimes I'd like to do just as the woman in the poem is doing...beautiful job.

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Moonshine this poem is amazing I'm numb with the feelings that shot through me as I read it....and most of all felt it.  I understand the words and have lived a life such as this.  Thank you for writing from your soul and sharing it.
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3 posted 03-08-2000 09:43 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW, Moonshine this is excellent with great imagery. Well done piece.  

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4 posted 03-09-2000 08:35 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your lovely reply and compliment Elizabeth - I wasn't gonna post this but my flatmate thought I should. You would like to do what the woman in the poem does? Why (may I ask)? It is a very personal poem for me.

Moonshine.
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Thanx for your lovely reply and compliment B_D_C!
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Thanx for your lovely reply and for your encouragement DA.

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