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Evening's Illusion
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Evening's Illusion |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Evening's IllusionIt has been a day of calm. The sky has stayed a deepened shade of turquoise, and now is deepening still. A creekrock sort of purple forming just there, along the edges, moving in. The sun begins to lower itself toward the earth's eyes, and shadows form, as shadows will. Children play, enjoying the last few minutes of their day. Parents talk in kitchens, before dark. I move through the empty house turning on lamps and listening to sounds of the evening's approach, wondering what night will bring.  Claire |
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merlynh Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411deer park, wa |
"Come night, come darkness, for you cannot come too soon or stay too long in such a place as this." Charles Dickens |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Claire, this is lovely..." a creekrock sort of purple..." made me see it with that line. This has a comforting feel...thanx... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Simply awesome  This brings about the feelings of me wanting to go home......to be there before that sun sits. Beautiful picture painted with your words There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You painted a beautiful picture with your words, a work of art that I could look at each day and never see everything that it has to offer. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Meadow lady .... You did it again. Perfection penned. Lovely watching the night move in. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
merlynh, Dickens also said, "Darkness is cheap, and Scrooge liked it." *smile* Thanks for reading. serenity...thank you for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it. First Knight...that feeling of ending the day among the things of you, in the place of you, and with the knowledge that you can be you...I know what you mean. Thank you for reading this. Butterflies...I'm glad you enjoyed the picture...thank you for your lovely response. Marge lady *grin* Thanks a bunch, so glad to know you liked this one.  ~ Claire |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I loved your vidid images you have so easy created. A very nice poem. Marina |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
As you may have been able to discern from some of my poems, I enjoy calm of the night, and to say I enjoy your wonderful words here would be an understatment. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
With each poem, you share something new. With your talent, even if you wrote nothing but night poems, we'd find something unexpected and waiting to be discovered in each one. Keep it up! Mike |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
hey now - I like Darkness - does that make me a scrooge? Hope not - cause I love this poem and I don't think Scrooge loved anything - at least not at first... You poems are nothing short of enchanting, Claire. Michael |
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Mars Junior Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 10 |
"A creekrock sort of purple" An image making line. Killer, Claire. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marina, thank you for reading and sharing such a nice comment. (bsq)Mike...Night time is when I find myself writing the most...perhaps I should take out my laptop during the day and see what happens. Thank you for reading. Michael...no, that certainly doesn't make you a Scrooge... It was just the only Dickens line about darkness that I could remember! Thanks, Michael.Mars, you liked that? Thanks for reading and letting me know. (o: ~ Claire |
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