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Beneath the Rain

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poetFemmeFatale
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0 posted 03-08-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

First, I must give credit where credit is due.  Mr. Haley inspired this one...one of his poems had this fabulous line that just gripped me, and so I went with it.  Thank you sir  - I owe you one.  pFF


~ Beneath the Rain ~


Pelting tears
beneath the rain
my silent scream
I can't explain.
My knees pulled to
an empty chest
I close my eyes
they beg to rest...

Freezing winds
they whip my hair
no emptiness
can dare compare.
Here am I
beneath this rain
my face is like
a windowpane...

Pelting tears
are streaming down
upon my soul
I pray I drown.
Are you out there -
beneath this rain?
Please dry me off
and keep me sane...

- poetFemmeFatale

© Copyright 2000 Gennifer David - All Rights Reserved
First__Knight
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1 posted 03-08-2000 07:06 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Ouch...... the storms of life can often bring us down.  I enjoyed the look into your storm and am wishing more sunshine to calm the storm that rages before you.  I found the meter to this like the pouring rain.....down and down it came
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2 posted 03-08-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Here's a dry towel for you, and I make pretty
good potato soup too!  HUGS to ya, and ooh, it DO get better.   Powerful piece.
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3 posted 03-08-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Wow, this poem I liked so much I'll have to look for the inspiration behind it! What was the title of the inspring poem?

Elizabeth

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-The Crucible

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4 posted 03-08-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Perhaps an umbrella?   Very powerful Femme. . . and I want to know where the inspiration came from too. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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5 posted 03-08-2000 10:53 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Oh Femme...why'd ya have to go and make me cry?  (it's all right though) This hits far too close to home right now.  Painfully sad and exellently written, I am impressed.

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

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6 posted 03-08-2000 11:37 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Well Femme, I'm glad you liked that line, and an interesting and deeply sad direction its taken you. Wonderful poem though, sorry about where it took you..... Hugs!

For those interested the poem is called
"each and every time" found at your local Passions book store in the romance section.
..... I should get a job doing this.

Parker
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awww sis...need a hankey?  Isn't about time for some Spring rains?  I'll frolic if you will...
poetFemmeFatale
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ROFL at Mr. Haley!  hehe (he hates that I think - to be called Mr. )     Anyway, you should all go back and read his poem that he mentioned above, "each and every time"...it's in here, not too far away!  It was an awesome piece, and that one line grabbed me and wouldn't let go!  I really liked the idea of being *under* the rain.  Yes, it sprouted a depressing piece from me, but that's okay!  I don't mind the rain at times...it cleanses me.  Thank you again James...  

Serenity, Elizabeth, Alwye - It means alot to me to have you ladies replying still...Thanks a million!  

And to the gentlemen - Thanks for loaning me your hankey, umbrella, etc.!!     You guys are the best!  hehe  I appreciate each and every one of you...you've kept me sane AND dry....  LOL    
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9 posted 03-09-2000 10:00 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

pFF~ this is great! Sad, but flowed wonderfully. -SEA
angel girl
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10 posted 03-09-2000 01:01 PM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

Oh, this is so good!

 One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.
-William Shakespeare

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11 posted 03-09-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for MyPenNameIsSam   Email MyPenNameIsSam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MyPenNameIsSam

Wow...takes me back to many painful yet somehow comforting times in my life... I find the rain somewhat comforting but at the same time able to go with the frustrated mood...
-molly aka sam

 "Always be willing to sacrifice what you believe, for the truth."-jps
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12 posted 03-09-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Femme~

You've still got it girl.
Touching.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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