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The Pain of Perfection

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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I want to first thank you for making me feel safe to expose my soul and not be afraid of who I am.

THE PAIN OF PERFECTION

I awake to the sunshine
and a soft blowing breeze
The day is all mine
to do as I please

Another perfect day
The first of many
To got out and play
of these there are plenty

The sun on my face
The wind at my back
It's not a race
I don't have to keep track

I walk and I hum
as I move along
Smiling to some
feeling like I belong

We watch the sunset
On a beach of white sand
This place where we met
tonight as we planned

Good night my sweet
you whisper to me
Tomorrow we'll meet
again by the sea

As we part for the night
you come close to me
what a lovely site
as I look up at thee

As I drift off to sleep
I still feel your kiss
The memory I'll keep
knowing tomorrow will be like this

I awake to rain
Things aren't what they seem
I remember the pain
It was all a dream

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Martie
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1 posted 03-08-2000 04:48 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Isn't it nice that we can dream.  Lovely poem!
poetFemmeFatale
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We must be drinking the same soda, cause I've had this exact same dream!  ARGH....Kind of scarey to say the least....(shivering)  LOL  Seriously, this hits home in a way I don't care to remember...I have learned to keep my feet on the ground, and my head out of the clouds!  It's much safer that way.  You don't have to worry about someone taking your love, and mocking it, as they throw it to the wind!  hehe  Yeah, it's dreams like these, that usually turn into nightmares before you wake up!!!  ROFLMAO in fright....     Fabulous poem nonetheless!  You described it perfectly!!!
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Butterflies~ You write beautifully! I could smell the salty water, feel the moist air on my skin....then I had to wake up! -SEA
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Beautiful poem, Butterfly.  I wish I could have a dream like that and make it come true.    Well said.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Martie: Yes it is nice  

pFF: I try to keep on the ground but sometimes the need to soar is much stronger...lol I loved  your view on this.

Sea: waking up is the hardest isn't it?

M.P.N.Sam:  Thank you and yes I wish for the same.
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ButterfliesDC~
This is filled with lovely thoughts.
Dreams have a way of letting us know
what to look for when we're awake.

Thank you for sharing a little piece
of yourself with us.
~*Marge*~



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Butterflies,You write so beautifully!
As I drift off to sleep
I still feel your kiss
The memory I'll keep
knowing tomorrow will be like this

Especially loved these 4 lines.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


 
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