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do we all go to heaven when we die?(some reworking makes it more coherent, I think)

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Corazon
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0 posted 03-08-2000 09:32 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon


one two three four five
do we all go to heaven
when we die?

the web of lies was spun just to see
what torment they could catch
and you oh so easily fell prey
you ripped my mouth open
and jumped down my throat
your unbelief
scratching and shredding
the innocence of my remains
and days later, still wincing
with the pain of the ankle that I turned
running from you
from me
from too much for one mind,
I totter on the brink
of trying to go on
and I wonder does grace
cover the bare spots
when trying
isn't enough?

I see the tears
and watch the sobs
and I know your pain
is real
but I hear the words you
reason out of your head
and I wonder
does grace cover
insanity too?

excuse me could I interrupt your
tirade of pain
for just a minute or two
you'll need to loosen your grip though
I am turning blue...
I never said you didn't care
I said
you care too much
crushingly, suffocatingly too much
and in your saner moments
I think
you hear me
but it doesn't fit with your black and white
care
or not
reasons
and
I need to walk
no, I need to write
no  no
I need to walk and write
walk, to stay the scream that has wrenched
itself in my middle
write, to quiet the poetry tap tap typing
in my head
so that I can close my eyes
and  pray
that grace (and mercy)
covers poets
too.

so now its your turn
and not by my hand, either
by her highness, the exalted one
your friend of friends,
that my lowness (in your eyes) can not abide.
someone (evil I suppose) fed her lies
about you this time
and she swallowed the unbelieving
and tonight
you cry
why?
you can't see
that its just
your
turn.



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 03-08-2000).]
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Nurse Crachet
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1 posted 03-08-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

Wow, excellent writing in this poem, Thanks for sharing this.
Christopher
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2 posted 03-08-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Umm.. wow, different
Danny Holloway
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3 posted 03-08-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Can't help but feel the inner struggle that your having.  Heavy expression used here for sure.  and yes, Grace does cover poets.  I have this from a higher authority.
Best wishes for you.
D
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4 posted 03-08-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Corazon are you going thru something really hard right now?   I believe that Gods grace, compassion, mercy, healing, and love does reach out to poets as well as every other sinner in this great big beautiful world.
Take care.   James
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5 posted 03-08-2000 11:04 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Anger is not equivalent with disconnection but it is the path...

huggsz
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Grace does cover poets my friend because unlike most others, we see not only with our eyes but also our minds and more importantly our hearts.
(((((HUGS)))))
Corazon
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7 posted 03-08-2000 11:29 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thank you all...NC have enjoyed your writings also...danny and jm....yes, inner and outer struggles...big time...and yes I know God's grace covers me too...lr...thank you
hoot, you snuck in while I was trying to reply...rough nights make for incoherent replies lol...big hugs back and thank you



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8 posted 03-08-2000 11:31 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Surely you jest?...Me? Heaven?...Ummm....think about it kid?..Toerag Heaven?.....If you do die before me, which is unlikely, but, would ya take a resume' for me?...You know...ya wouldn't have to lie too much?.....I hope God's got a great sense of humor....surely he can take a joke...Ya think?.....I mean, he did create LongJohn and Balladeer?.....
Corazon
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9 posted 03-08-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thank you Mr. toe....needed a smile...and I am positive the resume of your heart will get you in with no probs  
Toerag
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10 posted 03-08-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Hi ya my dear one of my one and only's..how in the health are ya kid?
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Corazon
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12 posted 03-08-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

Hoot!!!!! love that....thank you  

and toe...I can say I have been better...but then I could say I have been worse...so guess I am somewhere in the middle...its hard to say for sure...sigh...sure is good to see you  
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13 posted 03-09-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

An excellent poem that screams with pain... Those saner moments when he hears come all too seldom... I've no doubt whatsoever that you and Toe are both destined for heaven... but I'd just as soon you delay that trip for quite a while... this one and only needs you both! *S*
JTF
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14 posted 03-13-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

I need to walk and write ... you've just written ... and pretty well I must say ... so now you need to walk ... *S* ... HUGS
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15 posted 03-13-2000 07:54 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
Deep, deep thought process going on here.
I like the presentation.

'and tonight
you cry
why?
you can't see
that its just
your
turn.'

Powerfully spoken.
~*Marge*~


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Corazon
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16 posted 03-13-2000 09:53 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thank you much...the opinion of all three of you means much...thank you  ...and sigh...must say this is a much better monday than when this was created
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