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do we all go to heaven when we die?(some reworking makes it more coherent, I think) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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one two three four five do we all go to heaven when we die? the web of lies was spun just to see what torment they could catch and you oh so easily fell prey you ripped my mouth open and jumped down my throat your unbelief scratching and shredding the innocence of my remains and days later, still wincing with the pain of the ankle that I turned running from you from me from too much for one mind, I totter on the brink of trying to go on and I wonder does grace cover the bare spots when trying isn't enough? I see the tears and watch the sobs and I know your pain is real but I hear the words you reason out of your head and I wonder does grace cover insanity too? excuse me could I interrupt your tirade of pain for just a minute or two you'll need to loosen your grip though I am turning blue... I never said you didn't care I said you care too much crushingly, suffocatingly too much and in your saner moments I think you hear me but it doesn't fit with your black and white care or not reasons and I need to walk no, I need to write no no I need to walk and write walk, to stay the scream that has wrenched itself in my middle write, to quiet the poetry tap tap typing in my head so that I can close my eyes and pray that grace (and mercy) covers poets too. so now its your turn and not by my hand, either by her highness, the exalted one your friend of friends, that my lowness (in your eyes) can not abide. someone (evil I suppose) fed her lies about you this time and she swallowed the unbelieving and tonight you cry why? you can't see that its just your turn. [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Wow, excellent writing in this poem, Thanks for sharing this. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Umm.. wow, different |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Can't help but feel the inner struggle that your having. Heavy expression used here for sure. and yes, Grace does cover poets. I have this from a higher authority. Best wishes for you. D |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Corazon are you going thru something really hard right now? I believe that Gods grace, compassion, mercy, healing, and love does reach out to poets as well as every other sinner in this great big beautiful world. Take care. James |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Anger is not equivalent with disconnection but it is the path... huggsz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Grace does cover poets my friend because unlike most others, we see not only with our eyes but also our minds and more importantly our hearts. (((((HUGS))))) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you all...NC have enjoyed your writings also...danny and jm....yes, inner and outer struggles...big time...and yes I know God's grace covers me too...lr...thank you hoot, you snuck in while I was trying to reply...rough nights make for incoherent replies lol...big hugs back and thank you [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Surely you jest?...Me? Heaven?...Ummm....think about it kid?..Toerag Heaven?.....If you do die before me, which is unlikely, but, would ya take a resume' for me?...You know...ya wouldn't have to lie too much?.....I hope God's got a great sense of humor....surely he can take a joke...Ya think?.....I mean, he did create LongJohn and Balladeer?..... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you Mr. toe....needed a smile...and I am positive the resume of your heart will get you in with no probs  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hi ya my dear one of my one and only's..how in the health are ya kid? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
Hoot!!!!! love that....thank you and toe...I can say I have been better...but then I could say I have been worse...so guess I am somewhere in the middle...its hard to say for sure...sigh...sure is good to see you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
An excellent poem that screams with pain... Those saner moments when he hears come all too seldom... I've no doubt whatsoever that you and Toe are both destined for heaven... but I'd just as soon you delay that trip for quite a while... this one and only needs you both! *S* |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
I need to walk and write ... you've just written ... and pretty well I must say ... so now you need to walk ... *S* ... HUGS |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ Deep, deep thought process going on here. I like the presentation. 'and tonight you cry why? you can't see that its just your turn.' Powerfully spoken. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you much...the opinion of all three of you means much...thank you ...and sigh...must say this is a much better monday than when this was created |
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