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First__Knight
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0 posted 2000-03-08 05:24 AM



The Essence of You
~First Knight~


As I lay next to you and you looked at me.
I felt the tingle of your stare and the heat of your skin.
The folds of hair laying across your face with your head tilted so.
You shared with me that smile that could stop a million tears.
And your lips that could kiss a way a million more.
A firm stroke as your hand passed in my hair,
Your skin so milky white and pure as the sheets upon which we lay
Eyes so clear and full of life.

I still hear the echo of your laughter in my mind,
your voice in the halls of my memory.
Branded there with the essence of you,
burned in with the fire of your love.
I am forever marked and can see no other,
for in your beauty I am ruined.  
No other could compare,
and a sin it would be to try.


[This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 03-08-2000).]

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Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 2000-03-08 05:50 AM


Oh this is so beautiful

"for in your beauty I am ruined.  
No other could compare,
and a sin it would be to try."

This paragraph was excellent!



Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-03-08 07:03 AM


David~

Such lovely thoughts you pen.
What beauty is held in your verse.
The love wrapped in the lines
are perfections of your heart.

Good to see you, my friend.
Sending lots of hugs your way.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 2000-03-08 07:40 AM


This is so Beautiful and yet beauty doesn't describe the feeling that you left me with with your poem.  You have a gift of which I'm blessed to receive by reading the poetry that you write.
First__Knight
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4 posted 2000-03-08 07:55 AM


Thank  you so much Lost Dreamer

What a way with words dear Marge.  Nice to be seen    Thank you dear lady

Butterfly....I am flattered so and am deeply honored at your words

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.


Enola
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5 posted 2000-03-08 08:10 AM


This is such an amazing poem, I think everyone else has already said is more than I could.  The poem seems to me, to be as beautiful as the person you describe - if that is possible.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

Nurse Crachet
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6 posted 2000-03-08 08:39 AM


Wow, I loved this poem, must be someone very special for you to write of such beauty.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 2000-03-08 09:41 AM


David...there is such beauty and passion in these words. It is truly a poem that comes from the heart. Wonderfully done. It's nice to see you back
Ruth

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
8 posted 2000-03-08 10:21 AM


Rockin'!
Ah, the power of an impression!

Mistikman
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9 posted 2000-03-08 10:26 AM


This is excellent David. She must be absolutely phenominal  
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
10 posted 2000-03-08 12:42 PM


This is so romantic, it is my favorite of all your poems, lovely!

 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare



Martie
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11 posted 2000-03-08 05:09 PM


Very beautifully written from a most sensitive heart, I think.
serenity blaze
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12 posted 2000-03-08 06:33 PM


A total tapestry of words.  Beautiful, romantic, and so very touching...Applauding
wildly here.

First__Knight
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13 posted 2000-03-08 06:52 PM


Enola- Thank you so much

Nurse- She is very special to me

Hoot- Always a kind word  

Chris- Thank you

MisticMan- She is simply devine...and I hope to meet her face to face one day and share this moment with her.

Romantic Heart-  I am glad you have enjoyed  

Martie- Thank you

Serenity- What a wonderful thing to say....Thank you

MyPenNameIsSam
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14 posted 2000-03-08 07:01 PM


yes, this poem leaves one with a beautiful feeling.     I loved those lines "You shared with me that smile that could stop a million tears....I still hear the echo of your laughter in my mind".... so well put.  Beautiful.  
poetFemmeFatale
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15 posted 2000-03-08 07:11 PM


"Forever marked, and can see no other..."   Ouch...that is my problem exactly.  Isn't it funny how someone can leave us searching for something that can never be found quite the same?  My *mark* comes from almost 15 years back....that really bites!  Beautiful poem sir...your heart is sincere, I feel it.  
First__Knight
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16 posted 2000-03-09 09:02 PM


Thank you Sam....

PFF- So very nice are your words and I am so glad you stopped by so I could share some of mine with you  

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.


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