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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-03-08 04:24 AM


A Distinguished Gentleman

This romantic feast
set before a hungry palette,
unleashes a slow-cooker barbecue
that's been sweetly simmering
since the beautiful moment
two wide open searching eyes...
Tasted the distinctive flavor
of a distinguished gentleman.

Winds of pleasure
seldom crossed
his darkened paths,
since he rode
a distinctively different horse.
A horse many say
was slyly eating away his life.

The pale, cold, lifeless, faces
that he cautiously
encountered each day,
hauntingly displayed
the perils that encroached
upon their lives.

He found it bitterly difficult
to cheerily involve himself
in delightful adventures
that took place
within the grasping reach
of his forever
understanding friends.

Then came an extraordinary day
no pale, cold, lifeless faces
to greet him this day.
Instead what appeared
before him...
A beautiful, warm, smiling face,
and two wide open searching eyes...


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RufffRyder
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1 posted 2000-03-08 04:37 AM


Ya sure have a way with words.
Thank you for the read L.D.

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-03-08 11:01 AM


Wow, this is jam packed full of wonderful imagery  
mystery
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3 posted 2000-03-08 02:19 PM


Nice word play. This was an excellenet poem, I enjoyed reading it.
EagleScorpion
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4 posted 2000-03-08 02:22 PM


that one hits close to home there.. very nice.
First__Knight
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5 posted 2000-03-08 06:25 PM


Finely crafted Lost Dreamer and a movement of words
Lost Dreamer
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6 posted 2000-03-08 09:35 PM


Thank You all for your kind responses, glad you all enjoyed it.
Meadowmuse
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7 posted 2000-03-08 09:39 PM


I enjoyed this too, Lost Dreamer...such a neat descriptive piece depicting the poignancy of sudden vulnerability. Really nice writing.  

~ Claire

Lost Dreamer
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8 posted 2000-03-08 10:01 PM


Claire: Thank You very much, glad you liked it.
Denise
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9 posted 2000-03-08 10:55 PM


Gloria, this is so beautiful!

Denise

Lost Dreamer
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10 posted 2000-03-09 06:06 AM


Denise: Thank You very much.
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