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Angel Of Illusion

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


0 posted 03-08-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Christopher

initials
   of each  pain
   are inscribed
   on her gilden
   soul
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted

  
memories
   shelled  away
   buried deeply
   no remnant of
   then
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


hopeless
   is the dreary
   prospect  now
   of living out
   life
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


forsaken
   dreams into a
   charnel stile
   housing of no
   hope
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


revealed
   futility upon
   one faithless
   man bestowing
   lust
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


continue
   though  never
   will be shown
   traitorous or
   true
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


violated
   the  once she
   believed real
   is the  story
   love
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted


illusory
   the masque is
   portrayed her
   face a  smile
   faux
   tarnished
   broken
   tainted

  

  
  
  
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Poet deVine
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1 posted 03-08-2000 12:26 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow! Such wonderful poetry! I love the form, the images..the words....it's nice to read you again!  
serenity blaze
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2 posted 03-08-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?

This is a perfect example of why i missed you so...beautiful, Christopher!
A Romantic Heart
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3 posted 03-08-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Beautiful poem but sad that manyy women go through that kind of false love

 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare


Christopher
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4 posted 03-08-2000 04:38 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sharon - One of these days, you're going to have to say something bad to me... what with all your sweet replies, my head barely fits through the door!

serenity - I just got back from a business trip in Boulder, CO. I had a laptop, but silly me forgot to contact my ISP for a remote access number! Thank you for the welcome back!

ARH - Sad indeed, but while I focused on the female point of view in this, I wrote it from my heart. Women aren't the only ones with hearts to be broken! Thank you for the reply!
Beki
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5 posted 03-08-2000 04:40 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Wonderful christopher! the format is terrific
and the poem itself quite insightful...bravo!
Michael
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6 posted 03-08-2000 05:23 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Chris, I probably saw much deeper into this than I was supposed to.  You take your pain to such wicked vantage points at times. You have written a wonderful poem here.  Your talent never ceases to amaze me.

Michael



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-08-2000).]
Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 03-08-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

You write with a beautiful style and touch those that read to the core of the soul where the river of pain still flows.  Thank you for sharing your gift of words like the sunrise sheds it light on the darkness of the night.  
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 03-08-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Christopher...I can very much relate to this piece. Well don in its technique and presentation both  
Enola
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9 posted 03-08-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

I'm speechless, this is probably the most amazing poem I've ever read.  I find it an inspiration - you write like a true professional. I only hope that some day, I can write with such compassion and eloquence.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
Mistikman
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10 posted 03-08-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent poem Christopher, I like the repetitive use of
tarnished
broken
tainted
It helped to reinforce the message of the poem in a most excellent way  
Corazon
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11 posted 03-08-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

liked this and yes the format brought the message home even more so...great writing
poetFemmeFatale
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12 posted 03-08-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

     (hysterical laughter!)  

[This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 03-08-2000).]
Christopher
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Beki - The provision of insight is more than I could ask for, thank you for such a wonderful compliment!

Mike - Nope, not what you think... and I'm amazed I can amaze you!

Butterflies - What a beautifully poetic response. Thank you for bringing me a smile today!

Ruth - I know you can, thank you!

Enola - You've got me blushing a crimson shade! If this provides inspiration, then I am doubly blessed! (And I expect to see the resultant poem!)

Mistikman - Thank you, actually I was worried I might have overdone it. Glad o see it was well recieved.

Corazon - Thank you for reading and replying!

Gen - Thank you, I think... For the record: This poem is actually about myself and some of the personal trials I've experienced in my life. Though I don't necessarily feel this way anymore, the memories of it are still vividly etched in my mind. I swear this had nothing to do with anyone other than myself and the person whom was directly involved. I chose to view it from a female standpoint to gain a bit of emotional distance, and to bring a more subjective viewpoint to the feeling of the poem. When I started, it was from the first person, male, viewpoint. I found myself to "close" to the subject, so I found a way to back it off a bit. Then, I was able to recall the feelings, but maintain a space between it and I. Capice?  
Parker
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14 posted 03-08-2000 11:08 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Christopher, amazing, I really like that you can read backwards or forwards and its still a powerfull message.

Parker
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15 posted 03-08-2000 11:39 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Okay, as I read this from a *Christopher* angle - I see only the beautiful things inside you.  However, we have similar scars I believe.  I didn't take offense to this sir.  I found it to be completely honest and soul bearing.  Nothing wrong with that, no matter which angle.  Me capice.  (big troll grin)  
poetFemmeFatale
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16 posted 03-08-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

edited...

[This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 03-08-2000).]
Marilyn
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This may have been written about your specific circumstance my friend but it hits home for many of us (unfortunately). Well done.  
Meadowmuse
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Christopher, this really is a beautiful and evocative piece of poetry no matter what the point of view, and I thank you for this "gilden" gifting. (I loved that word...*smiling*)

~ Claire
Martie
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19 posted 03-08-2000 05:05 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Excellent Christopher!
WhtDove
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20 posted 03-08-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Excellent dear Christopher! Doing it from that view point, I can't say if that was easier or not! Great work, miss you around here!
Alwye
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21 posted 03-08-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Stunning, Christopher.  Sharply painful, and presented in a crisp, clear form.  You have phenomenal talent.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

Christopher
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22 posted 03-09-2000 04:25 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Haleyja - Awes-e-ome! You appear to be the only one who noticed that! It doesn't matter which way you read it! Thank you for noticing!

Gen - It's all good chick! No worries!  


Marilyn - I know,   Thank you!

Claire - You've left me a-smilin' wide! Thank you, I love the word as well!

Martie - Thanks for reading and replying!

Becca - I can't either, but it was instructive! Thank you, I'll try to be around more!  

Alwye - Now you've got me *blushing* Thank you!
Oscar Wilde
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23 posted 03-09-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for Oscar Wilde   Email Oscar Wilde   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oscar Wilde

I was searching for you, though I didn't know it. And then I saw the title of your poem. I too have an illusion to keep one that sears my soul at times. Your picture reminds me of that illusion and now I want only to cast off the veil and dance freely in your heart. I cannot take my eyes from the visage on this page. Have we met? Can we? I feel the pull of your words so strongly that I know I am forever rambling here. I apologize. I will now seek your words and drink of your greatness.
Gemini
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24 posted 03-09-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Christopher, I feel your words, have been there myself and have a girlfriend who is now experiencing the same.  Very excellent poem.  Hugs.
 
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