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Open Poetry #6

A Night With You

just_another_fe
Member

since 2000-02-05

Posts 483
MICHIGAN

0 posted 2000-03-07 11:16 PM

It's beautiful out here
as I lay on the beach.
I lay not on the sand
but on a red satin sheet.
The sound of the waves
crashing on the shore.
As I look to the stars thinking
could I ask for more?
You wrap your right arm
around my waist.
As I take in the warmth
of your loving embrace.
You pull me close
and i lightly kiss your chest.
Out of all the nights i've lived
tonight's the best.
The stars are bright.
The sky is blue.
Slowly I begin
making love to you.
After we're done
and the love making is through.
I lay there cuddled
close to you.

(long pause)

As I hold my pillow tight
the alarm clock rings
and i have to open my eyes
knowing all the pain it brings.
It was only a dream.
The beach, we were never there.
That perfect night together
was a night never shared.

RufffRyder
Member

since 2000-02-25

Posts 143
<------Over There------>

1 posted 2000-03-07 11:26 PM

WOW!!!
Your a kick in the butt.
The first part of this was Great,but then you put a frown in my heart.
Anyway thank you for the read Lil Missy

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-03-08 01:49 AM

Just a dream...just a dream
all my plans and all my schemes.
This was enchanting my dear...
and full of magic til that darn pillow appeared.

Lovely writing...I love red satin sheets, red dresses, red lip stick....enjoyed this very much. James

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-03-08 11:17 AM

I really enjoyed this one. Reminds me of a piece of erotic prose I wrote called Your Hands

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

4 posted 2000-03-08 11:22 AM

I always like a wicked twist to a poem, and you succeeded much. I like this one.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2000-03-08 12:24 PM

Just_Another_Fe~ I have a couple poems like this......I can relate very well. Thia is a GREAT poem!

-SEA

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