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Like a touch of mescaline

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 03-07-2000 11:12 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

  Like a touch of mescaline

Through the ferment on the lake,
Ran the currents of awake.
Moving all that float of green,
To a picture of serene.

Up above the clouds rode high
And the moonlight lit the sky.
Bringing magic unforeseen,
To an Eden moments glean.

Captive in its warm embrace,
Thinking thoughts of wine and lace
I was total with the scene.
Like a touch of mescaline.

And the wind brought leaves to gay,
Dancing, turning, in ballet.
Till a touch did stop my roam
And I heard the words go home.

I have fantasized before,
But never with such soar.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Meadowmuse
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1 posted 03-07-2000 11:29 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I think I like the way you fantasize, Seymour...this one sends me...

~ Claire
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 03-08-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

May your fantasies come true.
Exceptional poetry, as only you can write
Love ya
Liz
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 03-08-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour~
Simply breathtaking, my friend.

Within the touch of mescaline,
visions not many eyes have seen.
Turning thoughts to wings a'flight,
bringing fantasies to light.

Captivating me within the realm
of the beauty of surround.
Mesmerizing mind and tongue
vivid thoughts have just begun.

Soaring far beyond the me,
sights before I've never seen.
Winds of chance now blow me home,
but, oh what freedom was my roam.

~*Marge*~




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Corinne
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4 posted 03-08-2000 12:20 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Oh, Seymour, I'm there! What a fabulous poem!

Corinne
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 03-08-2000 08:57 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadow, Why thank you Meadow and I have gone on some of yours. *L*

Elizabeth, How many come true, I don't know
But they are with me all the time, Love Sy

Marge, Your poem was lovelier then mine, you should put it on the forum. *L*

Corinne, I'm glad I could steal your mind for a moment. *L*
serenity blaze
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6 posted 03-08-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Seymour, methinks this is better than mescaline...
Nate Dogg
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7 posted 03-08-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Seymore, you write the greatest poetry I've ever read. In some ways, your poetry has inspired me to be more artistic, complexic and creative. You've influence me to the point that I changed my style a little. My next poem on this board will pay homage to you my friend.

 Nathan
Martie
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You have a magic place, dear Sy, and I'm so glad you share it with your words of grace.
hoot_owl_rn
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This one makes me soar to read  
Denise
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10 posted 03-08-2000 11:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Sy!

Denise
bboog
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Sy: You had me going. I'm new here, so please take these suggestions with a grain of salt. Since mescaline is a powerful halucinogentic, I kind of expected a little more excitement/imagination.
  Example:"moonlight exploded in the sky" or "I embraced the total scene". The last two lines (I think) should be rewritten as they are weak.
Again, only my two cents worth.
best regards,
bboog
Michael
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12 posted 03-09-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

One little touch will do it.  Wonderful work, Sy...I'm soaring.


Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-09-2000).]
Seymour Tabin
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Serenity, Me thinks so to, thank you.

Nate, It is an honor to inspire you. I will look for your poem.

Denice, Thank you sweet. *L*

Hoot, Thank you for the beautiful comment. *L*

bboog, I did,nt say I took the mescaline. Thanks for the critic.

Michael, Thank you much Michael.
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14 posted 03-09-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Keep soaring, Seymour... and thanks for taking us with you! *S*
Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 03-09-2000 10:15 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Suthern,
I'll try *L* I'll try.
 
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