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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 03-07-2000 11:06 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

Treading at the edge of twilight,
My soul mirrored within the dark.
Broken dreams hold no light,
When shadows leave their mark.

But what can one do when enslaved?

Cold thoughts whisper in the fog,
My heart strangled with emotion.
I sense you through the smog,
And I flutter with devotion.

But can my tattered soul be saved?

Doubt pulls me under inky seas,
The tide rising with the pain.
Rays of starlight harshly tease,
But little joy do I gain.

Why is simple contentment unreachable?

Sorrow misted within my eyes,
And I reach out with all of me.
Somber are the greying skies,
And alone is how I may forever be.

Why is what I need untouchable?



 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

© Copyright 2000 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Dusk Treader
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1 posted 03-07-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Such feelings of darkness and solitude.. I thought I could feel a yearning in there.  Such a beautifully dark poem, my friend, but I hope life calls you to write about happier things soon.  

 Abrahm Simons

Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light.

Meadowmuse
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2 posted 03-07-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"Doubt pulls me under inky seas,
The tide rising with the pain."

You've expressed that doubt and longing so well with this poem, Krista. I know it so well. Wonderful writing, and so true to emotion. I must thank you.

~ Claire
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3 posted 03-08-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Darkest shades of gray I see here.  So sad and wanting.  I do believe I have been living this lately.  You bring it to life with your talent
Alwye
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In the space between moments


4 posted 03-08-2000 08:43 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

First_Knight- It's very easy to bring to live when you are living it.

Meadowmuse- Thank you so much.  I'm glad you understood what I was trying to say.  

Dusk- You can learn a lot about me from my poetry. There is yearning there...and I too hope the happiness comes again. It's been absent for a long time.


 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 03-08-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Your poetry is so strong with pain & sorrow, my heart aches for the depths that you went to while you wrote.  May happiness return and fill you with peace.
Janet Marie
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6 posted 03-08-2000 09:31 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

this is exceptional, need, want, longing, all expressed so honestly,
take care, janet marie

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie

Michael
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7 posted 03-09-2000 09:11 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Krista,  Know I will never stop reaching for you.  You are not alone, here, and yes - you can be saved.  Sending you a big (HUG).  You will get through this, I promise.


Michael
JamesMichael
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8 posted 03-10-2000 06:07 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I really liked this Krista....James
Severn
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9 posted 03-10-2000 06:19 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh Krista...this is just exquisite - and I'm sorry that something so beautiful is of such pain...

stay strong...but remember to cry if you need to.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Alwye
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10 posted 03-10-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Butterflies_don't_cry- Thank you so much for your kindness.  

JM- Thank you also.  

Michael- A special thanks to you.  I will be forever grateful for the help, support, and friendship you've offered me lately.

Severn- Thank you.  And yes, I cry.  Way too much in my own opinion.  But it does help sometimes.  


 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

 
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